OMG.Zahra I am speechless.What a wonderful pıece.It was really sad and so touchıng too.I know how these chıldren suffer because of wars and wrong polıtıcs but I hope our world becomes better.

I am just...simply speechless. this is so powerful and sad. Its an amazing write. 5/5

Great job there is to much war going on and it directly results the children much more than people seem to notice but yes this is a great work.

WOOOW! its such a great poem, it actually brought tears to my eyes.
its such a shame children have to suffer the consequences of stupid adult decisions. war is never the answer.

A very catchy title...
Sad poem but very well written!!
The description, usage of words... everything fits perfectly!

Keep up the good work! :)

5/5.

It was sad but it was an awesome write..
i could really see myself there..nearly brought tears to my eyes.
keep it up! :)

WOW; the way you wrote this poem is magnificent.
I loved the way you tinted the pain through your careful (yet deep) words.
Little drops of crimson rain; that line got me and "Still he sits calmly through the chiming of wars bell" - and this one brought back memories.

Love it; a great piece; keep writing.

OMG!

this is one of many poems that are really memorable.

beautifully written!

huhuhu...and it's your fault that you made my eyes teary!!!...

>>>good job!!!

~midz

Beautiful a very beautiful poem about war
its perfect one of my favs its flowed perfect
great job 5/5!

Speechless. i had that werid tingly feeling all the way to my toes. its so sad to see so many innocent children suffor. war does nothing but cause destruction and lies. they say heaven and hell exisit within the brightest and darkest of minds....i see that hell is on earth. with only the glimpse of heaven that shines. brillant.

victoria

OMFG!!!! This is terrific! I love it. And I cried too cause someone i know died in the war.

Wonderful piece of art...It touches the soul and inspires to pray for the well-being of orphans and those who are abandoned..

Inna lil'llahi wa inna ilayhi raji'un(To God we belong, to him we will return). This is such a heart touching piece, very heart breaking. It's very unfortunate that such pademoniums have engulfed our societies. The masses, wives, youths and children are always victims of such calamities. May the soul of the repose that lost their lives rest in the bosom of The Almighty, Ameen ya rabban alamin. I pray God takes control of this chaotic miseries at His appointed time of Glory and Mercy to us His servants. Written with compassion and breath-taking words. I love the idea you inncorporated in conveying such delicate and sad cases. Flow is good, I'm really impressed, take care. Jazakallahu Khairan, remain blessed. :)

'Little drops of crimson rain
Restfully dropping right by his side
Stroking the hair of the mother who died
Innocence of his eyes glittering through
The sorrow and sadness of the scene past
his eyes flew'
Children don't deserve to see such things,wait.. let me change that.. no one deserves to witness such gruesome sights. These lines kinda made me angry, reminding me of the countless times this has happened and will be happening again. No man should die in the hands of a man. Yes, we all die, but it doesn't have to be like this..

'Still he sits calmly through the chiming of
wars bell'
And this just shows that he's really innocent, doesn't know what's happened and what is happening..

'A sight of an angel flying by
His soul carried to the heavens high
Leaving a precious little body behind
A sign of the blind war wishing to grind'
I love how you ended this, but although he's in a better place now, the war is still ongoing.. more innocents' blood shed.

Really well-penned.5/5 Keep writing!

-X