Comments : Winter Beauty

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Seeds awake in rainy spring
    Shake off the winter cold
    To bathe the world in loveliness
    Greens and blues and gold"

    What an entrancing way to start of this piece, definetly touches my heart and captures my attention.

    "Flowers gleam in every garden
    Summer sun and breeze
    Giving all to life they can
    Before the winter freeze"

    Nice rhyming here and throughout, also good flow here..

    "Leaves of different colours
    Floating to the ground
    Happy to greet winter
    And kids who twirl around"

    Great descriptions, so true what you wrote.

    "Snowflakes fall as winter rings
    Happily unique
    Beautiful in every way
    Winter's cold mystique"

    Breathtaking stanza, especially that last line. Wow, this has to be one of my favorites by you, this one is so touching and fun to read.

    "Why can't we all function
    As seasons embrace change
    Accepting winter's winds will come
    And life will rearrange"

    I like how you just don't describe winter, but right here, this is such a thoughtful stanza, that makes us stop and think. I love how you connect everything together, your words are so inspiring.

    "For bitter winds may blow on through
    Hurt and pain may follow
    But beauty's found in everything
    Unless we sit and wallow"

    Very wise^,perfectly worded, not much more to say.

    "The beauty found inside that flake
    Of cold and bitter snow
    Is everything that we could be
    If only we would grow"

    Good ending, leaves the reader wanting more, but still satisfied. Take care, 5/5. Keep writing, always and forever....