Where is a kleenex when you need one? this is so sad, my eyes are so teary (hard for me to get tears), guess it helps when one can relate to the poem. sigh...but excellent choice of words, the flow was so smooth and i could visualize all this happening before my very eyes. bravo bravo, keep it up.
Wow. I was just looking for a poem that expressed how I was feeling, and you nailed it.
Pillows smother my silent screams,
In a bed we no longer share.
^ These lines were excellent, they stuck out the most in the poem to me. There are filled with imagery. I like how you don't tell exactly what happened, and while you're filled with sorrow at the loss of someone important to you, it seems to me like you blame yourself for whatever happened. And how even now you blame yourself and still feel the sorrow. Amazing poem, i think it was drawn out just enough for all the emotion to be portrayed and then ended at the perfect time with crystal clear finality.
Aw! this is so adorable!
well for starters I just want to say that this is very relatable and easy for the reader to understand. I enjoyed the fourth stanza a lot to me it was the most creative and held the most emotion. You painted a very clear picture with it. I thought the flow was pretty good you kept it very neat. The rhyming was right on I never got tired of it!
Your poem made me cry.
brings back all the pain of a lost love.
9 years ago
This poem touched me so very deeply and brought the tears to my eyes. I feel this whole piece 110%, every word so true.
The ryme was excellent, and the flow was flawless. Another beautiful poem from you :}
Wow OMG, that was teary
I personally didn't think the poem held specials meanings before reading the last stanza.
I do think it's awesome, I can feel the pain you're going through, I think I'm in the same position.
be strong and god bless you :)
beautiful piece indeed
I got no other words to say
you left me speechless =]]
Loved it! It was so real and full of emotion. I can truly feel what you were expressing because surely it came straight from the heart. Your flow was flawless without anything seeming out of place or forced. I loved that last two stanza because its imagery was so powerful, I could picture what you were saying.
"Knowing your not on the other end"
^you mean "you're"
Well done. I really enjoyed reading this piece because it was real easy for me to relate with.