Scars of Dark

by Lu   Sep 2, 2008


Ancient moments fuse the mind
shadows hold upon waters deep
heart recalls haunted times
when memories betrayed sleep

Sands shifted , silence screamed
smothering once promised dreams
illusions of happiness portrayed
nothing is, to what it seems

Naked in the arms of misery
love engraved paper nor stone
lies revealing a putrid stench
as trust led to paths unknown

Desolate soul grips reality
courage ignited from a spark
closing doors of foregone days
unleashing shackled scars of dark

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  • 15 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    Luanne, this piece is awesome. It's funny because I went off the club poems page, just read Frank's "So deep in love" poem feeling good and happy. You took me from my happy place into this desolate feeling of darkness. Not exactly a good thing, but way to use such powerful emotions to key me in.

    Ancient moments fuse the mind
    shadows hold upon waters deep
    heart recalls haunted times
    when memories betrayed sleep

    What a nice, nice stanza. The last line is phenomenal. It flows so well.

    Great write! Thanks for sharing!

  • 15 years ago

    by Rican Chemistry

    Hey Luanne, nice to read some of your poems again...

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    What a cleverly written, thought provoking piece. Excellent word choice, rhythm and flow. I love that you have not used forced rhyming and this poem is deep and meaningful!

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    Desolate soul grips reality
    courage ignited from a spark
    closing doors of foregone days
    unleashing shackled scars of dark
    This stanza is fantastic. A ray of hope at last! Very well constructed lines.
    Through out the poem lines are very strong. Like... 'Naked in the arms of misery...' Brilliant. Fabulous work!

  • 15 years ago

    by Deana

    An excellent write Luanne,Sometimes it takes a lot of courage to open up your heart and lay it out there for all to see. The true mark of a poet.Allowing the reader to feel our pain,facing the vulnerability. My hats off to you ,excellent rhymes and flow. great job!