Comments : No Worries My Love

  • 10 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I love the wonderful atmoshere you have created with this piece, wonderful reassurance, kind of like a nice warm robe after a bath. C'mon sit yourself down and drink this coco :)

    Only one query, is there a rhyme scheme, for i couldn't quite follow it. It didn't matter though, because its wonderfully chilled anyway.

    Take care

    Michael

  • 10 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello :)

    I like this poem, it has a mystical, untouchable quality about it.

    No worries my love, I'll be there.
    Think of me as a scent in the air,
    Or a soft brush of the skin,
    You can even think of me as that sensation,
    A humbling sensation that the wind brings.
    ^
    A farewell to someone, someone who holds or held a special place within you and you them. I like the way you try to soften to emotional trauma by offering a reminder of love, but no, rather your spirit, the essense that makes you who you are. That spirit held in memory, but to a hopeful imagination it could be held in a breese, in a scent or even in the wind and the way it caresses your skin, likened to how those fingers used to caress.
    I also like the rhyme between, skin and bring. (I like rhyme) :D

    No worries my love I'll be there.
    Dream of my smile to calm your rapid thoughts,
    ^
    In dreams we can drift to a place where happiness lives, so offering that as a solution to 'rapid thought' to ease their anguish is a sincere gesture.

    Imagine my kiss to make the time go on.
    Don't stress my love, you'll be fine.
    No worries my love I'll be there.
    Wah Dan Yi my eternity.
    ^
    This concludes with perhaps the most significant symblo of love - a kiss, or rather, the memory of one, that one last, time enduring, heart soothing kiss.

    Wah Dan Yi my eternity.
    ^
    I presume this is who this tribute of love is for..I love the rhyme here too!

    Well done Cassey, I really loved this poem, you really managed to portray a higher love that rises with the wind and spans distances on earth and beyond.

    Take care

    Michael