In this quiet corner

by ShootingStar179   Sep 11, 2008


In this quiet corner,
I sit and wonder what it would be like,
To fall in love.

To have the dreams of a little girl,
Progress into reveries of comfort and bliss,
A man imperfect, yet complete

Like me,
Smiling with secrets within,
A key in the lock of nonsense hidden,

Bubbling up inside me to collapse onto paper,
No matter how incoherent and perverse,
I will fall in love with writing, before a man.

But to have words intertwine to make poetry,
A feat that these fingers have been inept,
For the longest time.

They ache under the pain of neglect,
And run over the keys like wind,
For once a writer is silenced,

The mind screams for release.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "In this quiet corner,
    I sit and wonder what it would be like,
    To fall in love."

    ^^ I adore these opening lines here, I find them to be both thought provoking and incredibly strong, portraying such depth in so few words, and a wonderful way to hook the reader into the piece.

    "To have the dreams of a little girl,
    Progress into reveries of comfort and bliss,
    A man imperfect, yet complete"

    ^^ This is just beautiful..I find this stanza to be even stronger than the last one, and it creates so many emotions for me as the reader.

    "Bubbling up inside me to collapse onto paper,
    No matter how incoherent and perverse,
    I will fall in love with writing, before a man.

    But to have words intertwine to make poetry,
    A feat that these fingers have been inept,
    For the longest time."

    ^^ I love the imagery you placed into these two stanzas, it creates such striking images for the reader, while the flow is perfect throughout, and again these stanzas are stronger than the ones before them, which I love, it's like you're building up to something...

    "For once a writer is silenced,

    The mind screams for release. "

    ^^ OH MY. Easily my favourite lines of the piece here..this is amazing...I read these lines and thought how many people can relate to this??
    I bet it's a hell of a lot!

    I adore this ending, because as I said earlier it's like you were building up to something..and clearly here it is..this is a stunning ending, hardhitting and powerful, something that will stay with the reader.

    I enjoyed this piece, I think you did a great job with this one.

  • 9 years ago

    by Viola

    This poem is so powerful and beautiful I think to all writers in general.

    "I will fall in love with writing, before a man."
    ^That is gorgeous writing. Honestly, I don't think I can put it better...but I feel excatly the same way.

    "For once a writer is silenced,
    The mind screams for release."

    ^The ending here is definitely the best part of the poem for me. There's this strong need to write that is expressed here that is just powerful. I love how you explained what writing means to some people...how it's a release of all the things you can't say out loud.

    I LOVE this poem. Keep writing. :)
    --Viola

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    This was absolutely beautiful, The word choices,the style you used....everything.A very sincere message. Loved it.

  • 9 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Nicely written and full of true emotions! I also agree with Bob about the last line...the poem packs a punch and the final line seems to detract from the already obvious......

  • 9 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Wow,
    all I can say is you have progressed so much and if this is the result of having not been able to write then you have penned a very worthy comeback.

    So many times I wondered what it would be like just to live a "normal" life and be accepted and loved for who I am. What a wonderful release to pen it this way. Great Job.

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