Good write. The flow was good, the word usage was decent, the concept was brilliant, and I could relate so easily to this. One thing is the way it was written in some parts could be improved slightly. But that doesn't stop it from being a very good poem! 5/5
"But she doesn't know when she flirts."
But she doesn't know it when she flirts.
"Love is making her goodness an illusion."
I don't like the word 'goodness' here.
Other than those things, it was a pretty damn good poem. I love the twist at the end of the poem, it's really interesting and sad at the same time. At the begining of the poem it sounded like another one of those stupid "oh but you don't love me" things, and I was going to comment that you change it but the end made it near perfect.
As a bit of advice, I would still say make a bigger impact in the beginning to draw the reader in.
Once again, love the ending, 5/5
Great write. I didn't find much wrong with it. One thing, though... towards the end you started using he word "and" when I don't think it was necessary. There were a few lines that began with and and without it, I think the poem still could have made sense. Hm, other than that.. I thought this write was amazing. I loved how you used such a small title and made it sound interesting. Great work. 5/5. (:
I really enjoyed this and I can really relate to it. I have guy friends who are in the exact same position. It's like if I were attracted to any of them and not already taken I would be there for them to show em there are good girls out there who do notice them and don't abuse them like that.
I love the rhyme scheme and the romantic theme. If someone gave me a poem like this when I was younger they would have seen the lights change. I can' tell if the subject is shy or arrogantly rejecting the admirer but it adds to the mystery