Nice to see you posting again. i leave tomarow night. sorry it didnt work out for you i know how much you caird for him. i realy wish things wher differnt for you. keep wrighting even thoe im mad at you plz blow me off cuz i cant stay mad at you and i know we all have our own ways and looks on things i just tend to find hait for me cuz its my only home

I really loved this poem a lot because I can really relate to what you're going through right now. I thought the flow was great and the word choice went well with it. Funny how we give so much and we give up so much in relationships, but if the other person doesn't do the same thing it's all for nothing. amazing job 5/5 GG23....P.S. Always capatalize your "I's :) Great job

Excellent i can feel those great emotions, its kinda so sweet and filled w/ so much sweet feelings. the flow and the messages was really powerful and it was very dedicated. i really love those thoughts, its simply express the deep words very well.. 5/5

I can relate to this well written poem

Your heart comes through strongly in this line "love that I can't let go
what kills me? the truth"
This line fre the heart for rebirth rather than to die with a lie
well done

Yes, I can see that this was from the heart, and it was beautifully written in every way. You captured your love, your hate and your sadness so well, but you did it with a grace and a beauty that i never will.
Love always,
Tara-Kay

Awe, this poem was so sad.. And very nicely written. It was powerful and emotion filled, you portrayed the sorrow perfectly. A very attention grabbing piece. Your word choice was good and the flow was even better. An outstanding poem. 5/5!

Ugh, thanks for reminding me of my situation lol. This was very sad but it read very nicely. i didnt strain to understand but i did strain in emotion because it made me think of someone that i can't seem to hold on to. At least we can know that we love when nothing else goes right. and i liked your profile and Jesus rockin your world. Keep it real.

Great poem, enjoyed it very much. There is a lot of emotion put into this poem which makes it that much better. Only thing is that the last three stanzas seemed a bit off flow for me. Well done.

It's always sad when a relationship doesnt turn out how you thought it was going to. I could relate to several different verses in this.

"everything you've become
was everything I didn't want
still I tried so dam hard...
to stay nonchalant"

I have recently split with someone who turned out to not be who I thought they were, and though I tried to keep myself from getting my heart involved, it was a losing battle! Great job on this. I'm glad you were before me on the comment chain and I got a chance to read it.

Ah!! Amazing poem. It's filled with your emotions about the one you care for. My favorite stanza would be this one :
He was everything I needed
I left home for what? you...
the love that I can't let go
what kills me? the truth

I particularly like the very last line of the stanza "what kills me? the truth" I'm not sure why but in a way I can relate to it because with every situation someone is in it's the truth that hurts the most. it's amazing what love can bring us to do.And in a way this poem shows us that.
xxxxxxx
roxy