A Heart for a Heart

You blended a lot of different things into this which is why i enjoyed it very much.

good job.
keep it up

The meaning behind your words here just truly blew me away. The was so much truth in what you had to say that I was nodding the whole time I was reading thins and thinking..."Hes so right!" I love poems that make you think and have so much depth because it truly lingers with the reader long after that have finished reading. Well done, the flow here was flawless.

*5/5*

"An eye for an eye a heart for a heart
Some say these words are a work of art
A heart for a heart a tooth for a tooth
Others say the word reveals the truth"

-- This is a great opening stanza. The rhyming was excellent, too. However, I believe there should be comma's after "an eye for an eye" [1st line] and after "a heart for a heart" [3rd line].

"Some say I have an ungrateful attitude
That lacks a certain blessed beatitude
Blest are the merciful for that they get
It is easier to forgive than to forget"

-- Oh, wow. You word choice in this stanza is absolutely perfect. Great job here.

"Some receive love others get hate
While we cast blame for our fate
When I am self righteous I take glory
And forget about the rest of the story"

-- A comma after "Some receive love" [1st line] and after the word "righteous" [3rd line].

"Convictions to the truth after arrested
Strengthens humility that is attested
The sorrow seems to heal the sin
Can a prideful loser ever win?"

-- I love the question at the end of this stanza. It leaves the reader wanting an answer/wanting to answer the question. Wonderful.

"Now you want to know how I feel
After you have taken what you can steal
A heart for a heart an eye for an eye
My savior rises toward the sky"

-- Great rhyming in this stanza. Again, though, I think there should be a comma after "A heart for a heart" [3rd line].

"To mend hearts and open eyes
Tears to see past the evil lies
Love is the fulfillment of the laws
It is the only answer and the cause"

-- This is a beautiful way to end the piece. It closed it nicely, without being to abrupt. It was great.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

Convictions to the truth after arrested
Strengthens humility that is attested
The sorrow seems to heal the sin
Can a prideful loser ever win?

loved those lines :) .
I think you could have used stronger vocab as you've done in some of your other poems otherwise i really liked it

Great outlook on reality. I loved how much advice this poem had. There was a shaky flow, but it was great from the word usage. The best was the ending lines.

"Love is the fulfillment of the laws
It is the only answer and the cause "

Very powerful ending. I loved it!

This poem is deserving of a 5 :P