Comments : A Heart for a Heart

  • 15 years ago

    by CalGirl

    Wow... this really speaks from the heart. i think this teaches everyone the "meaning of life" i guess. its really strong and powerful and i can really see where you're coming from. love is the cause of life and the reason for life. this poem is amazing.

    -Sophie-

  • 15 years ago

    by StarGirl

    I agree this is really powerful, the first stanza just grabbed me in and the flow is very easy to follow with saying a lot without it being overly wordy. It's very original and def deserves a 5/5!

  • 15 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Wow thats really a heart to heart emotions.. the title was very interesting seems really filled w/ outstanding feelings that no one can ever explainl. hmm i do really love the message very touching and the flow was good. i enjoyed a lot and i truly relate and carried away bout the message.. love it 5/5 keep it up!

  • 15 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Great outlook on reality. I loved how much advice this poem had. There was a shaky flow, but it was great from the word usage. The best was the ending lines.

    "Love is the fulfillment of the laws
    It is the only answer and the cause "

    Very powerful ending. I loved it!

    This poem is deserving of a 5 :P

  • 15 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Convictions to the truth after arrested
    Strengthens humility that is attested
    The sorrow seems to heal the sin
    Can a prideful loser ever win?

    loved those lines :) .
    I think you could have used stronger vocab as you've done in some of your other poems otherwise i really liked it

  • 15 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "An eye for an eye a heart for a heart
    Some say these words are a work of art
    A heart for a heart a tooth for a tooth
    Others say the word reveals the truth"

    -- This is a great opening stanza. The rhyming was excellent, too. However, I believe there should be comma's after "an eye for an eye" [1st line] and after "a heart for a heart" [3rd line].

    "Some say I have an ungrateful attitude
    That lacks a certain blessed beatitude
    Blest are the merciful for that they get
    It is easier to forgive than to forget"

    -- Oh, wow. You word choice in this stanza is absolutely perfect. Great job here.

    "Some receive love others get hate
    While we cast blame for our fate
    When I am self righteous I take glory
    And forget about the rest of the story"

    -- A comma after "Some receive love" [1st line] and after the word "righteous" [3rd line].

    "Convictions to the truth after arrested
    Strengthens humility that is attested
    The sorrow seems to heal the sin
    Can a prideful loser ever win?"

    -- I love the question at the end of this stanza. It leaves the reader wanting an answer/wanting to answer the question. Wonderful.

    "Now you want to know how I feel
    After you have taken what you can steal
    A heart for a heart an eye for an eye
    My savior rises toward the sky"

    -- Great rhyming in this stanza. Again, though, I think there should be a comma after "A heart for a heart" [3rd line].

    "To mend hearts and open eyes
    Tears to see past the evil lies
    Love is the fulfillment of the laws
    It is the only answer and the cause"

    -- This is a beautiful way to end the piece. It closed it nicely, without being to abrupt. It was great.

    Five out of five. [5/5]

    ``Briana

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    The meaning behind your words here just truly blew me away. The was so much truth in what you had to say that I was nodding the whole time I was reading thins and thinking..."Hes so right!" I love poems that make you think and have so much depth because it truly lingers with the reader long after that have finished reading. Well done, the flow here was flawless.

    *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by vintage darling

    You blended a lot of different things into this which is why i enjoyed it very much.

    good job.
    keep it up