Without

by Lu   Sep 22, 2008


Now feels like never
and close seems so far away
Moments tick as hours
foregone memories stay

Love a constant battle
fought between heart and mind
Painted smiles and eager kisses
passion and hate entwined

Sun rises on darkened days
yet rain continues to slither
Weeks and months hurry on
soul proceeds to wither

Time stands so very still
within this heart turned to stone
Without a promise of undying love
I'd rather go on my way alone ...

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  • 7 years ago

    by SheenaMarie

    I especially liked the first stanza...great poem 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Knee

    Awwww..
    I love this poem a lot sweetheart.
    It tore my heart to pieces.
    Loved the emotions you poured, I swear it made me feel like I'm the one who wrote the piece.

    I noticed you haven't written since March 26th, so I thought I'd comfort myself with your old writings until you post a new one.
    and I really did love this poem hunn.
    Looking forward to some new one :)

    Write on
    Love you~

  • 9 years ago

    by FallenAngel

    Loved the poem :)

  • 9 years ago

    by LockedAway

    That was awsome i have always wanted to do something where i could enter a poem but could never figure it out

  • 9 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Thank you for the comment on my piece of poetry and also congrats are in order for you too. This was a wonderful piece which I have the pleasure of reading.

    I adored the message within this piece, though it was simple it was definitly effective and created a sense of alone over the atmosphere. This poem had alot of emotion entwined with it and the use of memories in the first stanza really let the reader know what you were writing about.

    Now feels like never
    and close seems so far away
    Moments tick as hours
    foregone memories stay

    The first stanza above was my favorite. The flow of it just rolled off my tongue and stuck in my mind. It was a stanza that really plants itself into your heart.

    I found this piece to be lovely and again congrats on your win. You deserve it.
    -Mel