Comments : Without

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    What a heart wrenching piece. I needed my box of tissues when I finished thisd poem.

    Now feels like never
    and close seems so far away
    Moments tick as hours
    foregone memories stay

    How those memoreis stay with us. Making us ponder our future. Sometimes the memoreies that have caused us pain over shadow the happier ones.

    Love a constant battle
    fought between heart and mind
    Painted smiles and eager kisses
    passion and hate entwined

    Love and hate are sometimes so closely related. Hopefully you will be able to let go of the pain. Look forward to a future of love.

    Sun rises on darkened days
    but rain continues to slither
    Weeks and months hurry on
    soul proceeds to wither

    I hope the rain disappears for you and brings you sunshine and smiles. This is my wish for you. You deserve nothing less.

    Time stands so very still
    within this heart turned to stone
    Without a promise of undying love
    I'd rather go on my way alone

    You make sure you have that promise of undying love. So you can move on to a lifetime of love and happiness.
    Excellent job!
    Love you
    Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Corinne

    Oh my - who hasn't felt like this? Very powerful writing. The last verse is particularly fine.

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    This is a beautiful but sad write Luanne, It's sad but true that without that feeling of being someones number one, of having their undying love, our world can be covered with sadness. Pure and heartfelt! what can be better!

  • 9 years ago

    by Seductive

    Nice ur flow was good, short but kept my attention NICE JOB!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by *emmax*

    I sense a creativity that wells from a reservour deep with raging emotions that must not be kept locked inside.Hi

  • 9 years ago

    by *emmax*

    I sense a creativity that wells from a reservour deep with raging emotions that must not be kept locked inside.Hi

  • 9 years ago

    by M00TM00T

    THIS POEM IS F.Y.E!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Thank you for the comment on my piece of poetry and also congrats are in order for you too. This was a wonderful piece which I have the pleasure of reading.

    I adored the message within this piece, though it was simple it was definitly effective and created a sense of alone over the atmosphere. This poem had alot of emotion entwined with it and the use of memories in the first stanza really let the reader know what you were writing about.

    Now feels like never
    and close seems so far away
    Moments tick as hours
    foregone memories stay

    The first stanza above was my favorite. The flow of it just rolled off my tongue and stuck in my mind. It was a stanza that really plants itself into your heart.

    I found this piece to be lovely and again congrats on your win. You deserve it.
    -Mel

  • 9 years ago

    by LockedAway

    That was awsome i have always wanted to do something where i could enter a poem but could never figure it out

  • 9 years ago

    by FallenAngel

    Loved the poem :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Knee

    Awwww..
    I love this poem a lot sweetheart.
    It tore my heart to pieces.
    Loved the emotions you poured, I swear it made me feel like I'm the one who wrote the piece.

    I noticed you haven't written since March 26th, so I thought I'd comfort myself with your old writings until you post a new one.
    and I really did love this poem hunn.
    Looking forward to some new one :)

    Write on
    Love you~

  • 7 years ago

    by SheenaMarie

    I especially liked the first stanza...great poem 5/5