Firstly, I think poems in stanzas are easier for the readers to read. And as per my opinion, it would also be great if it all start wit Caps.

it seem your only reason why my heart is whipping;
"your" should be “you’re” and then the word "the"

how I could try to love someone if my heart is lock?
"How could I it should be I think"

but if there are somebody would attempt to;
"But if there is somebody"

whats this life for, if you're gone away;
"what’s this life for"

no matter how many people comes along with me;
"people come along"

and how many of them presented there love for me;
"presented their"

how i could ever forget someone like you?
"How could I"

I think those are the mistakes in your poem, although grammatically speaking, im not that good as well. Other than that, I loved the emotion set behind the words. Filled with sadness yet positive about the love you have for that person. Good job...

Sorry i have to redo my comment as there were boxes coming out. kindly please delete the the previous one..Thanks..

Firstly, I think poems in stanzas are easier for the readers to read. And as per my opinion, it would also be great if it all start wit Caps.

it seem your only reason why my heart is whipping;
"your" should be "you're and then the word "the"

how I could try to love someone if my heart is lock?
"How could I it should be I think"

but if there are somebody would attempt to;
"But if there is somebody"

whats this life for, if you're gone away;
"what's this life for"

no matter how many people comes along with me;
"people come along"

and how many of them presented there love for me;
"presented their"

how i could ever forget someone like you?
"How could I"

I think those are the mistakes in your poem, although grammatically speaking, im not that good as well. Other than that, I loved the emotion set behind the words. Filled with sadness yet positive about the love you have for that person. Good job...