Comments : The Dark Fortress of Memories

  • 10 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Your blue eyes starring, your foot rubs mine
    Heart racing, watching your father for a sign
    Smiling to her discretely, and giving a wink
    A memory shared only with my lady in pink

    ^^ I bet this was the memory you are most fond of!
    I loved the rhyming and the pace and well, it was a very entertaining poem.
    Well done, Bassel!

    take care!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 10 years ago

    by Blueleo

    Thank you all for your kind words, and I do apologize for the length. I actually cut it down quite a bit. I think the original was much better with many more rooms to walk through and a better description of the hallways and paths and the different great rooms and the hidden sword of justice. The rooms that didn't make it are the puberty frustration room, the lost and found room, the spring day room, the race room and others. Not to mention a more detailed description of the castle itself. This is a walk through my castle of memories that I build here and there for fun. Most of these are memories that came to pass but with a touch of class, lol. If people enjoy it enough, I might even make short revisits here and there. Breaking it into mini episodes.

  • 10 years ago

    by Blueleo

    Thank you all for your kind words, and I do apologize for the length. I actually cut it down quite a bit. I think the original was much better with many more rooms to walk through and a better description of the hallways and paths and the different great rooms and the hidden sword of justice. The rooms that didn't make it are the puberty frustration room, the lost and found room, the spring day room, the race room and others. Not to mention a more detailed description of the castle itself. This is a walk through my castle of memories that I build here and there for fun. Most of these are memories that came to pass but with a touch of class, lol. If people enjoy it enough, I might even make short revisits here and there. Breaking it into mini episodes. By the way, if you like this poem, check out another episode of it. It's the "The Fortress: Maze Garden of Peace"