Beheading of Gravel Toes

by BrokenREALiTy   Oct 7, 2008


Innocent feet fumble along piled gravel,
wincing at the roughness of a lonely earth--
outweighing the beauty of this child.

Nevermore begins to strap itself with love,
tightly winding through these pebble paths--
bedeviled by the Big Foot's spoor.

Extortion of a plastered heart, grabbing
with wobbler syndrome patent.
Invited were the soft cradle songs--
tumbrels hidden in disguise.

Have a guillotine--
or two.

under jurisdiction rule:
to love is to slaughter logic so--
unto this martyr, my lips give dignity;
send forward thy execution

for you...
skies cease to breathe
--rescue for dear clumsy toes,
as gravity stops falling.

©2008 10 06 Mindy Huang

*You're not expected to comprehend--as long as all makes sense in my mind, my heart's at ease.
**Edited for title.
***And changed one of the gravels...

NOTE: If it helps you understand a tad more... Read Melpomene's comment. She pinpointed the two meanings spot on, but this piece can always be interpreted in different ways and for other things.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Shades of Gray

    This is an acrostic poem, am I right? At least, it appears to be except for the last verse.

  • 12 years ago

    by JaM

    Rather than depicting your poem to the slightest detail, I shall say that it was very pleasant and understood. Your creativity of expression is intriguing. Thanks for sharing!!

  • 15 years ago

    by ether

    Ps.
    Aw it won't let me nominate it. But I added it to my favourites.

  • 15 years ago

    by ether

    Holy not-good-word-here.

    This is wonderful.

    I'm a big fan of free verse type poetry when it's done well, and this, this is amazing.

    The main idea I get from this is torment.

    Because you talk about death, conviction, Big Foot, gravel. All can be seen as a form of punishment (walking on gravel is definatly punishment, hah).

    The last two stanza's are outstanding. So well written, just, perfect. I'm the biggest phrase/metaphor fangirl.

    I can't even think of what else to say. The flow is pefect, stops and starts at all the right times. Your vocabulary could not be any better, matching the poem. You must be one smart cookie.

    Outstanding poem you have right here, 5/5.

    jess ~

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    I love poems that make me think with the meaning not apparent on the surface! Your title was flawless and quite a tool to capture my attention and have me curious to read more. Your word choice here was just amazing and the atmosphere you created was a pleasant one. There was power, depth and meaning thoughout this piece and it showed that you took a lot of time to craft such a masterpiece, and it showed! :] Very thought provoking and could be decoded in many ways which made it an interesting piece for anyone.

    "Innocent feet fumble along piled gravel,
    wincing at the roughness of a lonely earth--
    outweighing the beauty of this child."
    ^Very powerful and eye catching beginning stanza. The imagery here was flawless and your word choice was effective in expressing what you desired.

    Well done and thank you for sharing. :]
    *5/5*

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