Yesterday Is Dead

Wow, I always look forward to reading your work and seeing how you play with words, this surprised me though, sometimes I find it a little hard to follow, but this was done brilliantly. Excellent word choice and expression. I really love the way you ended it, the soul giving in. Beautiful work.

A very emotionally packed piece. Again, I am impressed with your word choice, simple by no means. Good flow and once again, void of forced rhyming. Great job!

Wow! I am utterly amazed, whole poem is so brilliantly written. You described so much in this piece. Atmosphere that you have created is breathtaking and the thing that impressed me most that this poem has such absorbing story behind itself that just captures readers full attention and leaves him wanting more. Words fit flawlessly and it seems that simply everything is in painful harmony in this poem. Some lines are truly bitter and that somehow made great flow. Whole poem fascinates me equally, simply amazing job on this one. You embodied every emotion within the lines, this poem impressed me a lot. I enjoyed in it, awesome, clever write. You created priceless piece here.

Well I must say.. this poem has left me speechless. The words you used were very impressive and how they were used without being forced was also another great thing about your poem. The flow was flawless, I didn't have to stop at all during the poem, you captured my attention immediatly with your words and kept it til the very end. Excellent write..Of course there's always room for improvement, but I myself didn't stumble across anything that was wrong. Flawless. 5/5.

"clinging to the words you'd never say,
writing the hell away to some distant constellation."
-- ...wow. I love these lines. They rolled right off of my tongue and they just sounded so beautiful.

"You're the best definition of a hallucination-
brainwash, suicidal in it's glorification."
- My favorite lines. Amazing.

I wish there was something to critique on this piece of poetry, but there's nothing! This was simply beautiful. There's no other words in describing it. I wish I had at least have the talent that you have. Nicely done. Overall: 5/5

Take care,
Stephanie