Darkness

by Lauren   Oct 22, 2008


Darkness challenges the light,
Pushing it away like a disease,
Shadows envelope the corners,
Until all light existing ceases.

The air turns to cold,
And your breathe produces clouds,
There's a crunching under your feet,
And skulls scatter the ground.

It's a nightmarish dream,
You wish it would all stop,
The skies open up,
And instead of rain, falls blood drops.

Quickly you take cover,
The coppery smell lingers,
And outside it looks like a slaughter,
The with a fiery explosion the devil appears.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Nikki

    Very good! :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Ravi

    A nice attempt. It also reminds me of my childhood, sleeping in a dark and feelings at that time. Try to use ore simple and smaller words..

  • 15 years ago

    by Obscura

    I think your poem was great dark and sinister loved it but at the end it lost its rythem and it needed more added after the devil appears but other than that great work

  • 15 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    To continue what Valet Every Wish has said, this is very good with some vivid imagery, but the problem for me is the length. Suddenly the devil appears...

    ...and the poem ends! We want more! :-)

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