I liked the alternating shorter two lines in between stanzas.

it added a good flow.

this was very well written.
some parts were a little bit broken, but i like the theme and overall sense it gave.

you're a good poet :)
keep up the great work.

1st stanza - 1st line; anew is one word, without the hyphen.

5th stanza - you use one thousand in both 1st and 2nd lines, it kinda sets the flow off a tiny bit. Change one so it isn't so bad.

5th stanza - 3rd line, we should be we're.. right?

Great work overall, I thought the rythm was decent, the rhyme was pretty good.. hmm, word choice.. I would have honestly liked to see a wider vocabulary in this poem but thats alright. You did a good job otherwise. 5/5.

Sad yet beautiful I honestly enjoyed reading it because every line held emotion =] The heading wall well suited and i'm glad you commented otherwise i wouldnt have seen your new work, really great job ^^

I love this.. it tells of a love that never died. touching. beautiful.. well written.
when you write.. i can tell you are sincere with your words. very good

5/5

Wow... That was pretty amazing ! Well written & beautifully penned 5/5

First line first stanza "life anew" it just doesnt sound right to me for some reason. I would put "new life" instead. other then that this poem is great. another 5/5

The concept to this piece was very original. Although at first it looked cliche, it totally turned around and had me trapped. The flow and words usage were amazing as well. This was a very good write and I'm happy to have read it! 5/5 for sure

I thought this was a very sad poem and I could relate to it with my fiancee. If something were to ever happen to me I'd want her to love her life best she could and not spend it crying over me...even though it would be impossible at times because I know I couldn't...Excellent job once again 5/5 GG23

This is beautiful...while rather sad, I like the fact that it shows possible hope throughout the piece.

"I know that is something that you both understand
that love isn't shown by a small little wedding band"

^^I think these are my favourite lines of the piece, simply because I don't believe in marriage, I don't think anyone should need a signed piece of paper to show their love for someone..you're supposed to do that everyday..and the point you make in these opening lines I find beautiful.

"I'm sorry that we had to say goodbye,
but in parting I ask you please don't cry
I know it's my fault, sorry that I had to die,
but I want to ask you to stop getting high.

I'm not worth losing all in your life
I'll be watching when you become a wife"

^^ I like this because when someone loses a loved one, or partner, etc, they often go on self destruct mode and you show that here, and I bet many people can relate to this.
"I know that even if I say it one thousand times
put it together in just as many rythmes.
you know you lost me, and we're sorry for that
but please get over me, before you snap

we're both sorry that I was never born
please, live your life after you mourn "

^^ What a beautiful closing to the piece..so much sadness throughout and yet so full of possibility and hope nearing the end..and the transistion makes for a powerful piece.

Beautiful.