Kinda creepy but i can totally relate to the feeling. I've learned ,however, as dumb as it sounds... "All will be alright in the end, and if its not alright, then its not the end."

Really a quite creepy poem...(happy halloween... :) a nice read for today... ;) )

Also a quite long poem...But worth the read...

It flows pretty nicely and it has an intersting rhyme scheme...

I still wonder... in the 5th stanza...
Instead "Are those that have broken my heart" wouldn't it sound better "Are those who broke my heart" ?

the poem is amazing, though :)
5/5 doubtless

*isabel*

I think this is dark, emotional with lots of doubts. Written well, keep working on these types of poems I see perfection.

You obviously have talent, it kept my interest the whole way through, partly cause im a follower of God's but either way, i like reading dark and creepy things and you hit it right on the bullseye, good work 5/5

Oh my gosh. That was intense. I could feel the rage and emotion you were feeling when you wrote this. Definitely understood the things you were feeling while going through this. Wow. Incredible. 5/5

Omg babe...
scary...
i like it tho...
wow<3

You were right, it definitly very powerful and packed with lots of emotion. Still I find this kind of vulerability to it which is quite freeing when reading this sorts of poems. It's very hard to do and often it's subliminalt in that you're so obsessed with spilling out all this anger and all this hatred, yet adding this pinch of something vulnerable.

Remarkable job.

--ares

I really liked this one! It shows how we would do anything to show a person our emotions even if it is negative emotions. i like how you describe it has selling your soul for power. i like it a lot!

Nice flow, reads nicely. Definately a creepy proposal. well done