Comments : You Colour My World

  • 8 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Sweet poem. The rhythm was a little off at some parts. But other then that i see nothing wrong with this poem. Nice format 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by michael

    I agree with his angel the rhythm didnt flow the hole way through but it was still a great poem i really liked the way you ran the title through the poem the format was cool.
    the poem showed quite clearly what you felt im sorry if it ended that way but you expressed it well still a 5/5 from me

  • 8 years ago

    by Sammerz

    THis was really good i liked how you did this
    you made it unique but yet had alot of feeling to it good job
    5/5
    Fantastic JOb!!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Very nice! I loved the way it was written. Your word usage was simple, but it had a lot of feeling. Also, it flowed beautifully... It was really enjoyable to read.

    Y esterday is just another memory ;
    O ne more day you made me laugh so hard I cried .
    ^^ this beginning was great because it captured my attention right away, and made me want to read more...

    Very good write! Keep it up! 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by claire

    Its amazing!!!

    i love it!!

    good job

    keep up the amazing work!!! <3

  • 8 years ago

    by ReBecca

    This was harder for me to read. You might want to not leave a space between the letters when you do a poem like this. I liked the tribute that you were obviously paying to a friend that was there for you.

  • 8 years ago

    by NeverBelieve

    I think the poem is great - dont see many around like this one - well done babe Cx

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a very well thought out acrostic poem that really comes together with a delightful free flow in each line

  • 8 years ago

    by BitterXSweetness

    I thought that this was pretty good. I liked that u made it acrostic that's something I personally find difficult. But I didn't give it a 5/5 bcuz I think that u could have have it rhyme a little better. Which I did see that u did little and that was good. But I think that if u made it rhyme a little more and made the lines a little shorter it would have been a little easier 2 read and understand. But it was a pretty good poem. I liked it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!

    I LOVE this.

    This is beautiful, and I'm sure whoever you wrote it for appreciates it alot.
    I find most friendship poems to become kinda cliche, but this...this is truly beautiful.

    Not to mention the fact I don't usually like acrostics but you pull of this style wonderfully here.

    The passion, the sincerity, the emotion, imagery...it all mels together to create such a beautiful read.

  • 8 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    Very cool, I absoultly loved it.
    The rythm and the rhyming were good as well as the imadgry.
    well written

  • 8 years ago

    by Katie

    This poem is so sweet! It really shows the depth of th friendship shared. Great job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Kimberley

    Okay I totally LOVE the first 6 lines. they were amazing. and so were the last 2. great poem and really well written. great job. 5/5. keep it up! ~KM~

  • 8 years ago

    by BloodyBrokenAngel

    I loved it. It was sweet.

  • 8 years ago

    by Hurtingsoul

    Its refreshing to see a poem done in a new style instead of the boring rhyme at all times thing. you did a very good job even if you put that extra u in color....either way it was a greaat read lol

    xHSx

  • 8 years ago

    by LiveLoveLearnDie

    Its really good to see a different format and to not always have rhyme at every line of the poem. I feel this is meant for someone very special and close to you and they should feel priviledged.

  • 8 years ago

    by Lucifer

    Great job hun and its good to see you using a unique setup as well 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This was wonderful!
    I can't believe how easily I relate to all your work.
    Im simply inlove with your pieces:)
    Well done, as Im begining to realize it will always be..
    your very talented.
    5/5
    -Paula.

  • 8 years ago

    by Maddy

    Yet another brilliant masterpiece. this reads like a regular poem, but you somehow managed to make it an acrostic as well! you have got true talent, i hope you keep it up! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Dustin S

    Im amazed actually. its hard to do this kind of structure. hey do u wanna have a collab? u can pick topic and structure!