A Perfect Night

Wow this is a brilliant poem the words were so desciptive and well written you could paint a beautiful picture with them the structure is good the emotion is so strong in this you can really feel it as you read it

well done

Excellent write. The imagery was outstanding. The flow of the poem was good, but could of been better with some puncuation. I can't stress it enough, puncuation is a big part of making it flow better as well the overall structure (which in your case is good except for the fact you have no puncuation)

I loved your use/choice of words, it greatly portraied the visual aspects of this poem. Fantastic Job!

Peace, Joe

Excellent structure in this difficult format, this poem flowed flawlessly with such beautiful romantic imagery.
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"November skies painted dark blue
Like an angelic midnight feast
Through hidden trees, a soft breeze flew
From the core of the night is a lullaby released"

~Oh, my. This opening stanza is nothing short of amazing. Your word choice, your rhyming.. everything about it just wows me.

"Desire is a shadow compared to our embrace
This melody of wonder, playing in my heart
All stars reunited in unending grace
Bound to us, drawing a piece of art"

~Another beautiful stanza. As I said, your word choice is great. I gotta point something out, though- the flow seems to be a bit off. Maybe give the piece another read, and see if it's just me?

"I lose myself in the sweetness of your voice
It feels like dancing between the candles of moonlight
If time and space could obey my choice
I would live forever in this perfect night"

~Aw. So beautiful. I think that this perfectly describes how someone feels when they're with the one they love more than anything. The word choice is a bit simpler in this stanza, but it's still wonderful.

Five out of five.

Briana

Wow...this really sucked me in deep. i really loved this. 5/5<3