Daddy's Girl

by Twisted Mind Broken Soul   Nov 19, 2008


She's a daddy's girl,
never leaves his side,
when he has to go to work,
she tries to change his mind.

She sleeps with him at night,
travels wherever he goes,
she'll go crazy when he dies,
this everyone knows.

One Friday morning,
he was taking her to school,
took her to her class,
she thought it was cool.

When school gets over,
she waits for her dad,
but he wasn't coming,
she starts to get mad.

Her mom pulls up,
with tears in her eyes,
"get in baby girl,
we have to tell daddy a last goodbye."

"Whats wrong with him mommy,
is daddy ok?"
"I'm sorry baby girl,
daddy has to go away."

"Your daddy was in a accident,
it's his time to say goodbye,
I'm sorry to say this baby,
but daddy might die."

They arrive at the hospital,
her daddys still alive,
she walks into his room,
and can't help but to cry.

Daddy grabs her hand,
and holds it real tight,
"baby I'm going to heaven,
but I know you'll be alright."

"So keep your head high,
and try to be strong,
listen to your mommy,
you know she's never wrong."

The girl starts to cry,
"daddy you can't go away,
I need you by my side,
please, will you just stay?"

"Baby girl I'm sorry,
but it's my time to go,
I'll always be watching over you,
I love you, this you should know."

Her daddy's eyes closed,
and his hand slipped away,
The little girl cries,
hating that terrible day.

This is something that I take personally!!!! I wrote this during school!!!

Please rate and comment, and I'll do the same

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  • 15 years ago

    by ForsakenBeautyXx

    Oh my gosh. I have shivers going through my body and tears forming in my eyes. A story about a father hits close to my heart. And you hit the spot with this poem. It was so beautiful and real. And I understood the emotion in every line. This is the best poem I myself have ever seen or read or felt. Beautifully Excellent Job, my dear.
    xox 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Lets Keep it A Surprise

    I can tell you have alot of emotion, but instead of trying to have everything rhyme it wouldve flowed much easier if you just let the words flow off. It seemed every rhyme was forced, using words such as "cool".

    The message was heartwrenching, I know how it feels to lose someone special to you, and I think you did very well in depicting the emotion. The vocabulary couldve been better, but other then that its not bad.

    3/5

  • 15 years ago

    by jessie

    I loved the poem you did a great job and im so sorry if this was based on a personal experience.

  • 15 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    I am just a little bit confused on the last two lines of the second stanza... Why does the dad have to hide when he goes to work?
    "when he has to go to work,
    he has to try and hide."

    Last stanza, third line:
    "cry's" should be "cries"

    Holy cow! I almost started crying and I am in the middle of the library.... this is a very deep and powerful poem. I liked your use of dialogue, it really relayed your message beautiful. Even my boyfriend said it was good.... and he really is not a poetry type of person, he absolutely hates it. So that means you did a good job! I totally agree. This is a peice of art. :)
    5/5

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