Comments : How you survive.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cyber Saiyan

    Interesting style of writing.

    The overall writing was impressive, reminds me of prayer or psalm; maybe enven an old proficy.

    I liked the use of power words, like DISMOUNT, STRIFE, and FREAKISHLY; they are not very common but add a real meaning to the line.

    Only suggestion i have is to pick one rhyme style and stick to it. The first two lines do not rhyme, but the next set do, as does the thrid. The fourth does not but all the rest do. It breaks up the flow too much.

    Otherwise, really well written.

  • 15 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    The touch of a Goddess, oh what shall he be?
    But, July seasoned with such generous curiosity.

    those were my favorite lines...
    I really likd this poem... the composition was very nice... it had a beat... well, to me. good job.. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Very meaningful and inspirational words of hopes. I enjoy my read and also your writing styles. It merits 5/5, keep it up, kel.

  • Wow, this poem was absolutely amazing. I loved the feeling in it and the flow was great. You wrote it perfectly. Good job. 5/5

    .:CiiNDY:.

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wooow you have literally left me speechless with this piece of yours. I adored this write for the main fact that for some reason it started out unique. I don't really have the words to describe how.. but a few lines just really wow'd me..
    "The touch of a Goddess, oh what shall he be?
    But, July seasoned with such generous curiousity."
    `Well done with these lines, I was quite impressed by its originality and I loved how you placed the word seasoned, it was unique and captured my attention! :] Your word choice was fabulous and everything rhymed beautifully.

    The last stanza.. woow. Well done! It sums up the entire poem, the feeling of love is the way you survive.
    Loved it, my dear. :]

    5/5. Keep it up.