Comments : Lucille

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem is very original yet it brings to mind a line from a song they said she died easy from a broken heart disease

    the plee seems to be to break the cycle instead overall I find the poem to be very deep the way I like them.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Well written... deep and at some point its touching ... at some places I liked the words you have used to express the emotions ...

    one suggestion would be- you can do away with some of the "she"s and "the"s

    overall a good read...

  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Wow, I cannot say much about this, other than Wow. This touched me, in a way more then most, the "My Darling" i know was to show the deep feelings you have for this person, but for me, it was unnecessary, now, you don't have to change it, for it doesn't take much from the poem, but I would if i were you.
    I don't believe I will forget this poem, and it made me think about things, thanks for that. The plee was repetition that fit nicely with the poem, it all flowed together very well.

    Amazing.
    *Chaotic Angel*