Curse Of Night

by oddi tea   Dec 9, 2008


It is the curse of the night
That leaves me trembling in fright
It is the curse of despair
That leaves the bitterness in the air

Awakened I lay
When nothing is okay
It is when I finally slumber
That it leaves me weaker

It's the images left behind my lids
From back when we were kids
My brother coming onto me
From his grasp I begged to be free

No such refuge ever came
So now who is to blame
I was once so innocent
Now my life is spent

The violence I have seen
When I was just a subteen
The horror and pain
Watching animals being slain

Why am I the way I am
Maybe its because of them
It is when I am so alone
I am such a foreboding stone

The night still holds its horrors
And the memories leave my heart in cinders
The gagging tape around my mouth
And the binding chains bind me as he heads south

The smells of blood and lust
Mixing with the erosion and rust
Mix in my nose, never coming out
Killing me inside as I shout

The pain isn't finished there
No, that's the beginning of the scare
He used to take these needles
And thread them through my ankles

Leaving them there for hours on end
Just as I'm about to spend
He tears them out with a sharp pain
As I scream with fear and shame

Throwing coffee mugs was next
While he screamed me hexed
But then comes the silence
It must be a transience

But here comes my savior
Who awakens me from my fitful slumber
It is searing against the deep black
But he tore the bonds, giving me some slack

He healed me more than any kind words
Or sympathy from bastards
It is the eternally slow breath
That preludes my painful death

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  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    Wow you are excellent in the dark poem category. You really had me anticiapating how you would end it. The rhyming was good and the immagery was very vivid. I liked your use of vocabulary. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Paiger

    Wow, you really paint quite the immagery in the readers mind, you really get us going, like a book you can't put down, you want to read it to the end. Great flow, nice use of vocabualry, always nice to not use the everyday words :)

    great job, 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    Wow, ok. i dont usually read dark poems that much, but this one was quite good.
    I agree, it was strange, but there isnt anything wrong with strange. It was interesting and different from most poems i have read, so well done.

    Your last stanza was very strong i believe, which is good for an ending in a long poem.

    It's the images left behind my lids
    From back when we were kids
    ^^ i think this is very clever. It is the images that are in your mind, in your memory, that still haunt you.. but the way you wrote that was very clever in my opinion, so well done.

    Overall, a good poem. Keep up the good work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    Ok that was stranger but i've written stranger, HAHA.
    Your poem was well written , the rhyme not bad at all but i found the meter/rythm slightly off in places
    just a suggestion that might help, if you want a better flow throughout your poems, count your syllables and try and keep a similar count in each line it works quite well.
    Otherwise i thought your poems was well written and the subject matter well chosen, it kept me interested.
    Well done

    Grant