Well written..
liked the last stanza the most...

"It's hard to die everyday
in bits and pieces she says.
With the love that had drowned
Am on the verge of falling down"

^^ well, i would have ended it here ... without the repetition... very beautiful lines...

keep writing..

With very limited words that you used, you have truly bring out the emotions that you wish to convey in ur poem. for me the end was alright cause it somehow creates the echo effects of falling down

Great Job
5/5 from me