Sobbing Skies

by Gem   Dec 18, 2008


Grey skies start to weep
Drenching the ground in seconds
Tears splash on impact

*Gem*

Copyright©GemmaStott2008

18/12/08
09.11pm

Wow. My first poem in god knows how long!! I am very very rusty so lets so who can get the hidden meaning behind this =)

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  • 8 years ago

    by mazie

    I dnt think this is about rain at all. i think you might be using a metaphore. i think that the"rain" could be an moment in ur life that u might have found hard to deal with. you refer to "rain" using very strong and powerful words. i think that "grey skies" is actully meaning your own eyes. "Drenching the ground in seconds." could be were you didnt feel able to cope or where emotions were to strong and over powering "Drenching" if you like . and "tears splash on impact" is the impact that this had on your life. however i am probs very very wrong and would be intrested in why you have dne this poem. i think it is so simple yet beautiful. a very good poem and its nice to see you back. enjoy and keep writing luv mazzie x x x

  • 8 years ago

    by Teria

    I have no clue what 'hidden meaning' you have behind this. But, at first I thinking that it kind of didn't work as a haiku because there was only reference to nature. BUT, when I thought about it I seen rain. Not tears or sadness, but rain. Maybe it's the emotional state I'm in but this is what I deciphered (sp) from the poem.

    "Grey skies start to weep"
    - At first I came to the conclusion that this line meant the rain was beginning to fall. But after re-reading what I honestly gathered from it wasn't the actual rain falling rather the skies turning from blue to grey.

    "Drenching the ground in seconds"
    - This is where the rain falls and creates puddles.

    "Tears splash on impact"
    - This is where the puddles are jumped in by little kids and sometimes adults.

    The reason I went over what I gathered from each line was to show you what I thought the emotional boundaries were. As I've stated before you're very good at taking different emotions and connecting them within small lines. I think the tears resemble letting go, obviously. But letting go to feel free from life not sadness. Life isn't sadness but sometimes life is a chore. And, no matter what your hidden meaning is behind this poem. I'll always look at is as a poem that means to let go of yourself, to wash away the obligations you have to be set free every now and then.

    Kudos though. There's many ways this poem can go, which makes it relatable. And the fact it's a total of 17 syllables is even better.

  • 8 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    I guess you have described rainfall here ... rain falling from grey skies and splashing on earth... beuatifully written... afetr a long time I am reading your work :)

    would love to know what you actually meant .. :) please post it :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Alex

    Hm, I dunno. Watching rain makes me feel sad. The end "Tears splash on impact" reminds me of that.

    Cool though.

    ~*Alex*~

  • 8 years ago

    by Nic39uy

    Hmmm. i have to say it's a girl crying, the eyes are the skies and the tears mixed with makeup to make the grey. with each tear dropping from the sky, it hits the ground and splashes on impact.

    iunno but it's sad yet makes one thinks

    oh and welcome back, haven't seen your work in ages. you'll be back to your norm in no time.

    good work, keep it up 5/5