Waiting In The Shadows, Until The Sun Hits Me To Shine

Very well-written and extremely relateable!

Excellent wOrk!
5/5 :).

I find that it's a little bit over played. It seems like I've read these poems over and over again. But it was still a good write. The flow was a little off. I don't really like the your vocabulary and I think there could've been a better way to write this.

Soda E>

I liked it. The flow seemed a little forced at the end but otherwise is good. Line 5 needs a comma after friend.
Although loving a guy who loves someone else is a common topic, this is different from all of the ones I've read. Meaning, in this one, the girl is his friend.
My favorite lines are:
"How much you miss her, and want her, need her back in your life.
I'll be the one you'll cry on.
The one that will always be there for you."

I get an image from that section. Very powerful.
5/5

You can't see what's in front of you.
Someone with love so true.
Someone that would give you anything, do anything just for you.
^^the do at the end of the third line throws it off it should be at the beginning of the fourth sentences other than that great opening : ) : )

But you don't see it. Not one bit.
I'm just a friend that's all I'm going to be to you.
Oh! How I want you, to open your eyes.
To see the heart I'm handing to you.
^^there shouldn't be a , after "how i want you," it is fine without one!!! to many girls are in this situation it's so sad!!! : / guys need to open their eyes !!!

To see what true smiles I share with you.
To realize that I love you.
But I can't do anything to help you out.
Just be hidden in the shadows.
^^awww i sorry for you : / it is so hard to feel so strongly for someone but have them keep pushing and pushing you farther away...

Until the sun hits me to shine.
But until that I'll be here.
Listening to you talk about how much you love her.
How much you miss her, and want her, need her back in your life.
^^it is so adorable that you are there for him that is so nice to do even though he is not exchanging the feelings you share for him it's very selfless if i may say so myself one day he will open his eyes and see that he made a mistake

I'll be the one you'll cry on.
The one that will always be there for you.
The one friend that will always have open arms for you.
To hear, to hold tight and never let you go.
^^.....the best friend role...so many people will be able to relate to this piece it is such a great thing to be able to connect with your audience!! it keeps us involved into your poem

Even when you don't know.
That it kills me inside.
How much you love her.
How much you need her.
Oh! How I wish I was that girl you need.
The girl you would love.
But I'm just a friend to you.
Just waiting in the shadows until you open your eyes and see.
^^one day he will see you in the light that you have always been in!!! you will find some guy that it doesn't take all of this to make him see how amazing you are ! than it will be this guys loss : )

5/5

So ur my new favorite author. U did an amazing job. 5/5.

wud u check out some of mine and give me some pointers? it wud mean alot. i have so much room for improvement.
keep up the good work.
-ashley.