Interesting choice of what to do. You(if i'm correct) are talking about how we as a society have changed and now it's not the simple pleasures that give us the joy in life.

I think that if the above is true that is one of the strongest poems that I've seen on here. I enjoy the message rather than the poems a lot of the time, I think that the message can stay with us while the poem can fade from our minds.

There is also another funny part, I just submitted a poem similiar to that only on a smaller scale.

This is a very well done poem.

5/5

I myself believe that poetry and though I have criticised for changing rhyme schemes fro quatrain to quatrain I am still very comfortable with it some have a prblem with it I feeel it enhance this one well and dare not suggest any changes

well done poem with a powerful theme