"My father is time
but my mother is death;
eternally inhaling
for a clean breath"
- Loved those lines.

I liked this poem. Actually, I liked the first few (four or five) lines of every stanza. Then I believe they were taken out too long. They fit, they work, they don't mess up the flow or any of that. I just didn't like how you changed from short to long.

Overall though, good poem.

I like this very much. It has strong meaning that most people are afraid to talk about. I think it is cool that you're not.