Comments : Starlit Eyes - Parallelogram de Crystalline

  • 9 years ago

    by Blissful

    What a beautiful love poem! I truly enjoy this form, Karan did an amazing job. Your use of words were flawless in expressing the love you feel for this person, you brought it all to life in my eyes. I applaud you!

    "Glistening
    Such translucent beauty
    Flickering colours, bewitching orbs"
    ^The imagery here just blew me away!

    Well done.
    I truly enjoyed reading it.

    *5/5*
    :]

  • 9 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    Thanks for the reply on my poem. And your poem here flows like magic. I could feel and see so to speak a lot of what you were trying to say. 5/5 Excellent work!

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Shimmering
    Bright snippets of pure light
    Representing the glow from sweet spheres"

    Love that word "shimmering", creates great imagery. Also the second line is worded very uniquely giving the reader clear visuals, and is refreshing to read.

    "Sparkling
    Suppressed laughter is seen
    Within depths of cerulean winks"

    Wonderful descriptions here, this is extremely-mind-blowing, I am awed at your orginality and creativity.

    "Glistening
    Such translucent beauty
    Flickering colours, bewitching orbs"

    Excellent wording, this is like entering another world of your words..Nice work :)

    "Twinkling
    Stars embedded above
    Are no match for your beautiful eyes"

    Great comparison here, you have me reading every line with such intrigue.

    Overall, 5/5 from me. I really like this format and your piece was a masterpiece in the form. Every single word was very entrancing and had me captivated. Nice job, you have me speechless! Oh and by the way, good luck in the contest....Take care and Happy New Year!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    A beautiful poem, Gem-- 5/5!

  • 9 years ago

    by trippetta TC

    Beautiful, am adding yo my list of fav's, love to hear differant forms!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Debbie

    Gem, you have taken my breath away yet again.

    "Sparkling
    Suppressed laughter is seen
    Within depths of cerulean winks"

    ^This segment made me appreciate the wonderful moment captured within your words. I can just feel... the warmth and the special bond shared by two people in love.

    Breathtaking. I love your poems so much.

    -Debbs

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    Nice, I think I have to try this form.

    It looks like fun. I haven't counted the syllables but I might come back later during the day to check to see if they are spot on.

    • 1 year ago

      by Gem

      Hahaha, I'm a perfectionist. They are ;)