WOW Cara,

This one was really scary!
it made me feel I was watching a scary movie!
Really good, girlie, good job:)

*hugs*
5/5 Ingrid

For a mintue thought i thjought you are talking about me,

dark poem indeed , and scary one too ,

even the lines are not straight but that did not matter in this piece, it was breath taking

*stop watching scary movies>.<

great one ^_^

Wow. This was just wow, very very deep and just wow a really great write, wonderful work. Love the rhyming and just the whole poem.

Great Job
5/5

Hey Cara that was an excellent and suitably scary poem well done on a most enjoyable read. just a quick mention of a small mistake , nothing serious. The last verse i think you meant *from whom he gets his thrill*

Well done

Grant

Well that was brilliant. -claps- I read it in anticipation all the way to the end! A different style it seems, you did wonderful too, like rhyming and overall the idea was a good one for horror! Thankfully I wasn't reading this at night! =]

Lol Cara you gave me chills..
I miss dark poems and their "darkness"
Girl that was very well penned !

"Collapse behind what appears to be a tree
Heave in and out as quietly as can be"

Loved those lines the most..although your rhyme went a bit off at some parts..but you couldn't cease grabbing my attention.
Liked the title, could've been better though.

Write on young poetess
Nee xx

Well well you have captivated me again with this thiller piece of yours.I can feel paranoid too as i was reading thru and waiting in anticipation wat's gonna happen next.

Leaves rustle next to you to inform that he is close
Hold your breath; you can't be his next killing dose

^^^ I like how you portray this stanza...kindda make me wanna hide and just stay quiet for awhile and i also like the idea of you making the killer's victim as his dose.

I'm really impressed by you to pen down this stunning piece coming from a person who hates scary stuff lol

Excellent Job
5/5

Another excellent write from you. It is dark and had me holding my breath until the very end. I just recently found your poems but shall read more of them in the future. Good job on this. 5/5

Amazing job! I was drawn in from the first word to the last, and I even read it twice! 5.5 ^_^

This is an awsome poem. Not to long ago there was a robbery here in the fort of Indiana. Well, the dude came in and we tried to hide, two of us got shot in the arm to insure we would do what they wanted. Try hiding, it did not work. lol. 5/5

PoetryKnight
aka
Aaron

OH wow Cara I really hope this is not a real story about you. The poem is great and it is very powerful, you definately had my addrenaline pumping with this one. 5/5