*applauds*
This was a great piece. It kept me reading from start to finish. Your word choice was great and the flow and rhyme were good. Just one thing, i noticed in the title:

Forever's Obession

^^ Forever's Ob[s]ession. Just missing an S there :)

Overall an amazing write, it seems your talent is endless. :]
5/5

Wow this was amazing. The wording was great and kept me reading from start to end. It was wow, really just awesome.

Wonderful Work

5/5

Wow the vocabulary used was flawless and it flowed very well. It was so sad and full of emotion, and I hold your words very close...
The ending made me cry and I believe that every day you are becoming a flawless poet. great job, never stop writing...You are meant to write. 5/5

Azzza,

To live in dreams can indeed be very alluring...but nothing beats the real thing;)

Very clever and well thought out poem, good job!

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

W O W ! I swear while reading it I really sank within imagination, and it doesn happen offten ! u really got a way in words! you should create a full movie about the way it is written ! PERFECT JOB 5/5

"Lingering around my distraction
Escapade to an exotic location
controlling all weathers and seasons
Within my own works of fiction.", This is my favourite stanza. Actually this is how i'm feeling after looking through my window and saw the cloudy grey morning, immediately i feel to travel to an exotic location, but commitment is got a hold on me so there are no place for day dreaming.
I enjoy your poems more and more. Well done, 5/5, kel.

What a heartfelt love poem you have written, the first stanza was very captivating and each line had me completely entranced. Nice work, excellent word choice and flow this was a treasure to read. 5/5 from me, take care...

I really loved your chioce or wording =] It was descriptive and very in depth ^^
The flow in each stanza worked well and made the poem more enjoyable!
Excellent job its a very creative and beautiful write, Nice work =]

"Measurements of desired dimension
Fairy tales plays magical illusion
Fulfilling my everyday addiction
Mind held captive in my own prison"

^^ I frikken adore this opening, so much depth and emotion and such beautifully portrayed imagery that I'm pulled right into the piece and can't wait to continue reading.

"Facing life's trials and tribulation
Drowned within my own delusion
Creating a world of perfection
With a twist of my mind's version"

^^ I'm finding this piece to become better and better as I go along, the depth in this stanza is incredible and tugs on the heartstrings of the reader.

"Lingering around my distraction
Escapade to an exotic location
controlling all weathers and seasons
Within my own works of fiction

Movement lose it's function
Life's unregretful decision
Choosing daily hallucination
Stuck in dreams never to be waken"

^^Favourite part of the poem. These stanzas hold almost as much power as the rest of the poem put together and blew me away.

"Love letters left unwritten
Sleeping into the deep blue ocean
Journey through forever's obsession
Pills overtakes my confession "

^^What a beautiful closing! I find alot of poems that are strong throughout to become weak within the closing lines, but that definitely isn't the case here, I found this stanza to be hard hitting and powerful and certainly something that will stay with me for a while.

My favourite part of this was the flow, absoloutely flawless, the words just rolled right of the tongue while the imagery portrayed throughout created such striking pictures in my mind.

The imagery, the flow, the content and vocab, it all melts together to create a beautiful read.

You have such an amazing vocab.

You reali create amazing imagery.
the flow is perfect.

you are such an amzing writer, your poems are perfect in every way

well done

Wow, this is brilliant there's not one weak link in this it's all very strong and powerful. I enjoyed this entire poem 100% brilliant don't know what else to say

Don't want this to be too long so I'll just say the number stanza lol

Stanza #1

I like the second line "Fairy tales plays magical illusion" I think I like it because fairy tales are something that I loved to read when I was younger but now that I look back on them they don't look as happy, and they do play magical illusions. I thought I would be a fairy princess but it never worked out... lol. The next line "Fulfilling my everyday addiction" I love it

Stanza #2

"Creating a world of perfection" It's an amazing line, along with "With a twist of my mind's version" I really really love those two lines. I can't explain why though.

Stanza #3

I like the last line "Within my own works of fiction" I think it goes really well withe the fairy tale line in the first stanza.

Stanza #4

"Choosing daily hallucination
Stuck in dreams never to be waken" I really like the flow of those two lines, it was really good rhyming, I don't think I would have been able to rhyme anything with hallucination.

Stanza #5

I really enjoyed the way you ended it. Especially the line "Journey through forever's obsession" and the line "Love letters left unwritten"

The whole poem is amazing. I love it. One of the best poems I've read.

Obsession is an ugly feeling but you shouldnt take pills to releave the pain

The title of this poem really dragged me into it. It certainly lived up to my expectations.

"Mind held captive in my own prison"
I LOVE this line. This line stood out to me more than anything else. Keep it up.

This is really great, and it really caught my eye... 5/5...check out my poems too....

This is a very unique poem. I think at times we all create our own dream world. It would be nice if we could stay where we make things the way we would like them to be.
Good Job!
Take Care Cindy

Another wonderful piece. :)

"Measurements of desired dimension
Fairy tales plays magical illusion
Fulfilling my everyday addiction
Mind held captive in my own prison"

In the second line, I think "plays" should be "play" - "fairy tales play.." sounds better, to me anyway, than "fairy tales plays". Also, I think "fairytales" is one word, but I'd look into that.

The rhyming was awesome, as was the word choice and flow. The emotions (again) shine beautifully. You have an amazing talent.

Briana