My Splintered Self

Wow this poem is totally blown me away.The imaginary is just so captivating.The choice of words that you used really bring the poem to life.

Silver blood bleeds from your eyes
And reminds us why we love the flag
The wood on your tree rots away
And reveals to us a beating heart

^^^ This is my favourite stanza. I like the way you describe tears.I find that you have a distinctive style of describing things.

Overall I must say that this poem is a brilliant work which also comes a great flow

5/5 from me

I am impressed with the consistent free verse flow that does not sap the imagination to the extent of distraction. Thus I feel the pain and understand it better than words alone could describe unfinished love.
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Very very well written poem, so much emotion in this poem, very beautifu

of course 5/5!

Naked blind and beaten
No skin to protect your feelings today
The wings the angels gave you
Salted and torn away

Splinters underneath your fingernails
Meat carcasses drip blood on the floor
Though I'll never feel your touch again
Your memory leaves me sore
**These were by far my favorite verses of this poem.

The begaining was a little slow and it took me a while to get into it but I'll tell you this, your poems aren't bad/horrid/whatever you want to call them. You have a talent and don't ever let anybody tell you other wise.
5/5
good job

Wow this is a very emotional piece and I found it very powerfull. Amazing job your wording portrayed your pain yet you wrote beautifully =]
deff 5/5!