Aww this was sad, i coukd feel the emotion you were going through, with the words you used, it was greatly written and wonderful rhyming.
Great Job

Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole

^^ Wew! beautiful lines Azzza!
An intensly sad poem, but knowing you, this could very well be fiction and I am really hoping that it is!
Anyway, it was written very well, you conveyed the message very clearly:)
Good work, my friend!

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

Amazing emotion in this poem.
Something about this poem gave me shivers lol
im not quite sure wat... (in a gd way)

Fantastcly written and great flow and a nice rhyming pattern.

dont stop writing

I really enjoyed reading this for myself personally the 1st and 4th stanzas were the standout because i can relate to these so well i think you have done a great job putting it into words it's really strong. I found the 2nd stanza the weakest to me it didn't fit in quite as well with the rest of the poem. the rest of the poem i find brilliant and very powerful and flows so well. Overall wonderful work 5/5

Wow Azzza, a terrific write. You have outdone yourself. If you dont mind me suggesting, just a couple of tiny things :]

Buses and trains provides transport
^

Clouds fills with rain and thunder
^
Again, should just be fill, without the S.

Thoughts of closeness only drift us further
^^ I love this line. It was very original, i lovedddd it. Awesome, awesome line.

Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole
^^ An amazing ending. Really well done Azzza.

A great poem to add to your collection :]
5/5

"Promises made up of empty words
Trust betrayed by lines and verse
Precious moments couldn't be reverse
Life seems like a never ending curse"

^^Reverse-reversed.

I love this opening stanza, straight from the start there's so much depth and emotion that I'm instantly pulled into the piece.

"Time slips away, couldn't be caught
Buses and trains provide my transport
Your plane takes off from the airport
Unspoken words unable to teleport"

^^I love the imagery in this stanza, it creates such vivid pictures in my mind that it's like I can -see- everything that you're describing.

"Clouds fills with rain and thunder
Thoughts of closeness only drift us further
Hopes for sweetness only proves bitter
Changing season calls for surrender"

^^I was thrown hjere because in the previous stanzas there's a fixed rhyme scheme and here there isn't one, and it threw the flow a little for me.

"Heart useless clutching on for years
Dark rings circling eyes full of tears
Longing and waiting but you never appeared
Fate's interpretations remains unclear"

^^Favourite stanza so far. The depth and emotion within these lines is incredible and creates so many emotions for me.

"Living life without a purpose nor a goal
Orange summer turns winter cold
Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole "

^^Beautiful way to end this piece, filled with such melancholy yes, but nevertheless beautifully written.

I really enjoyed this.

This is a great poem, I love the flow. Great emotion. My two favorite lines are...

"Time slips away, couldn't be caught"

This line, because I love just the way you say that time slips away. It's so true, it does. And the rest of that stanza just flows with it. I also like the line "Unspoken words unable to teleport" it's amazing.

Another line I really liked was...

"orange summer turns winter cold"

I'm not quite sure why, I like the way you added the colours to it, if that makes any sense.
Great all together <3 5/5

Azzza, as usual great imagery. You knows how to pour out sadness that tickled the eyes and sadden the heart, yet i guess this is the fruit of your imagination. I really enjoyed my read. I like this line...
"Time slips away, couldn't be caught." Yes this is a fact, since we cannot return to yesterday, nor turn back the hands of time, this made us usus these words so often, "if i did know". Very well done 5/5, kel.

Very touching write ... each line displays the grief and sadness in your heart...

"Promises made up of empty words
Trust betrayed by lines and verse"

^^ I loved the starting ... it captured my attention... i love the feel of empty words and their betrayal...

"Your plane takes off from the airport
Unspoken words unable to teleport"

^^ loved the imagery here ... its like something which was in your reach has moved farther away ... and you cannot catch it... beautifully penned...

"Orange summer turns winter cold"

^^ again loved the imagery here...

"Longing and waiting but you never appeared
Fate's interpretations remains unclear"

^^ very hearfelt lines... we still wait for someone... knowing that they would never return... the pain is unbearable...

"Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole "

^^ very touching ending ... womderfully worded

very enjoyable read...
keep writing...

Hey everyone has a purpose and ur hear for a reason. dont let anythin get u down 5/5

Azzza,

Title: Empty Promises.
It is preety clear what this means. It is usually said in retrospect of a person's broken promises, a promise that it is thought the person never intended to keep. So with this said, the title suggest a poem with a certain amount of resentment flowing through it. Let me see..

Stanza 1:
This starts from the off with resentment. It also reveals (if I'm right) that the person may be another poet by reading the second line and its reference to lines and verse.
You also refelct on mis-fortune in this area of life in the last line. Life certainly does feel like this at times and feeling cursed is not uncommon.

Stanza 2:
This seems to be describing past events, a tense time where lack of communication fueled the anguish, right?

Stanza 3:
This continues on from the last stanza, except the time lapse is longer. I liked the opposites in lines 2 and 3, near and far, sweet and bitter, these speak for the resentment mixed with sadness that was felt.

Stanza 4:
As with the previous two stanzas, this has moved on in time further still. It also speaks off a person who yet after all this time is struggling with the past hurt and because if this is finding hard to move on and forget this trauma.

Stanza 5:
Such a sad ending. This describes a broken person who can only replay history's event, like a roundabout that never stops to let the riders off, trapped for eternity on a ride that seemed so much fun in the beginning and now is a ride from hell. Sound familiar?

Azzza, I like the rhyme scheme that you have used and it flows fairly well throughout. You could have maybe been a bit more imaginative with metaphors and this would have given the poem added depth.

Well done on this.

Michael

I think this is a beautiful poem =] It's well written and the emotion put into the piece was placed very well throughout each stanza. The overall flow worked really well and your chioce of wording, I feel added a little more depth. I also thought the ending to your poem was very sad yet a perfect way of ending the piece 5/5

"Promises made up of empty words
Trust betrayed by lines and verse
Precious moments couldn't be reversed
Life seems like a never ending curse"

-The beginning of this is purely amazing. It completely had my attention at the first line. I love how the first line of every line is of an emotion or describing a moment.

"Time slips away, couldn't be caught
Buses and trains provide my transport
Your plane takes off from the airport
Unspoken words unable to teleport"

-This stanza I had to look over, because I really wanted to think about this. I like how this whole thing is about transportation, but how you let the reader feel the pain of time assing by.

"Clouds fill with rain and thunder
Thoughts of closeness only drift us further
Hopes for sweetness only proves bitter
Changing season calls for surrender"

-I like how the person keeps realizing this stuff. How she hopes, and then her hope is let down.

Heart useless clutching on for years
Dark rings circling eyes full of tears
Longing and waiting but you never appeared
Fate's interpretations remains unclear"

-I can picture this person so clearly the way you describe this person, is beyond amazing.

"Living life without a purpose nor a goal
Orange summer turns winter cold
Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole "

-I like how you talk to the person who did this to you. I mean it was hopeful still at the beginning, but then it just became , how you just had to realize it was over.

Amazing poem. Full of depth. Great imagery. Awesome word choice and structure.
5/5

"Promises made up of empty words
Trust betrayed by lines and verse
Precious moments couldn't be reversed
Life seems like a never ending curse"

I absolutely love that stanza. I know so many people can relate to this poem. Great piece of work, and awesome title to go along with it. :)

Living life without a purpose nor a goal
Orange summer turns winter cold
Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole

Not just the best stanza in this poem
but the best stanza I have read in a while
Especially the line
"Orange summer turns winter cold"
Just paints a brilliant picture

The rest of the poem was very well written
It flowed really well
I really enjoyed reading it

5/5

Amazing poem with great emotion, well worded and the flow was exellent, loved the last stanza!
xoxo
5/5

I like this style

This entire poem is absolutely amazing. The emotions pour out perfectly. The flow, and the word choice are completely on-point.

"Living life without a purpose nor a goal
Orange summer turns winter cold
Have sympathy for this tired soul
Fore you have left me a burning hole"

= This is my favourite stanza. The second line, more specifically- it created a picture in my mind, more so than any of the other lines.

Overall, a beautiful piece. :)

Briana

"orange summer turns winter cold"

I like the transition and the way you show a happy feeling becoming lost and cold..you have really poured out your feelings into this write..beautifully sad.
Thank you also for the comment on my write..take care.