Comments : Everyone dreams

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This has a beautiful free flow and passionate desire delivered well

    my only suggestion would be to and word between nobody and you

    Eyes for nobody you,
    Eyes for nobody but you,
    Eyes for nobody except you,

    overall excellent 5>>>>>>>>>

  • 15 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Line six "been" to "bend".
    Too "old, old school" to comment on this style, but think with metre this would be very good.

  • 15 years ago

    by M I L L Y

    I agree with ur poem "Someone like that must be a dream. "
    keep up the good work

  • 15 years ago

    by Annaam

    Very relateable, sweet and true! :)

    It's excellent but I think you can improve it by paragraphing... It'd give the poem a better stucture, I think... :)

    5/5
    Keep It Up! :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Well I like what you have penned down. It is true that everyone desires someone who matches their own personality. Sometimes we think a person like that only exist in our dream. It was certaily deslightful to read. Keep it up

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Not Enough

    This is so cute<3 It has a lot of great emotion in it. And I can totally relate to it! Great poem! I think you should write more though, I'd love to hear a longer version. But either way it's good! Grea flow! And I'm glad it doesn't rhyme because sometimes when poems rhyme, it gets off topic or just doesn't make sense.
    Excellent job 5/5

    Soda<3

  • 15 years ago

    by bacha

    I loved it for real :)

    keep up the good work
    supernova
    smile all the time :)

  • 14 years ago

    by silvertung69

    Yes, so many times we thaught our dreams came true only to wake up next to a pillow.
    vary sad truth.vary good.