Sanity

by Krista   Feb 2, 2009


So quick,
my memory is elusive,
diminishing quickly.
I'm losing my sanity.

It's moving quicker,
blind to fetal eyes,
hiding in small corners.
I'm losing my sanit.

Mesmerizing colors
hold me closer in.
Pull me into depths.
I'm losing my sani.

Tears from eyes,
sprung from my own?
I cannot recall tears.
I'm losing my san.

Help me find a way,
what's my name?
I am utterly lost.
I'm losing my sa.

My time is coming,
the light drawing nearer.
My mind a prank.
I'm losing my s.

My mind has lost,
I'm waiting to die.
I'm failing quickly.
I lost my sanity.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    'So quick,
    my memory is elusive,
    diminishing quickly.
    I'm losing my sanity.'
    `I didnt really like 'so quick' it wasnt poetic to me, and it wasnt the strongest beginning line. Maybe try a synoymn for quick like instantly, and just take out so because thats not poetic. Plus you used quickly after diminishing, repetition like that can tear a poem about very quickly.

    'It's moving quicker,'
    `I know youve improved a lot since this poem was written, lol. You repeated quick again... and I know you are much better now with controlling repetition.

    I really loved how you made 'sanity' disappear as you read the poem, you drop one letter. That was a unique idea, really truly (: I thought it was great. It confuses the reader a little bit but its easy to catch on to!

    Well done... I know youve wrote better pieces since this, I just thought Id comment anyways. :]