Torments Favored Son

Lovely piece. sad yet able to keep the reader attached. the flow is great and the emotions are passed on to the reader. The understanding might be different, but who am I to resist the powerful emotions put to it. good art.

Yes, this really is a sad piece, but excellently written with a wonderful rhyme scheme and flow.
"cast into a sorrowful abyss, on Satan's rotting breeze...." - my favourite line, amongst many good ones!
All the very best
Ben

This is dark and so very deep. I really like your selection of words.
Great write friend

all the best and take care

"Cast into a sorrowful abyss, on Satan's rotting breeze.
No longer does happiness exist, pleasure a cruel tease."

Loved these lines. Very dark, and sometime so very true. Have felt these feelings myself from time to time. Often asking myself if happiness... true happiness really does exist in this world.

Although this was a dark write, I saw more of the mournful touch of lonliness and pain in the words.

Good job.

Always
Jeannie

This a such a dark tale ...of sadness... loneliness... frustration ...
so emotionally powerful...

//Damned to a eternity of suffering, torments favored son. //

^^ beautiful yet so sad... wonderfully penned...