Wow i like how you excute this poem. It is terrific; your portrayal of true love.Well before i read this poem i kindda read ur profile. Well it musta sux to have someone you used to love choose some other over you.Though i can sense a little enmity and sadness when you penned it down, I was surprise and happy how you end it. Well it was certainly a delightful to read.Keep it up
I can honestly say with all that I'm going through with my break up with my fiance this poem just made me open my eyes a lot. It is inspiring and helpful. Your words really got to me and is really making me think. It shows strong emotions and heartfelt words. You did amazing.
Wow I must say for the age of 16, you are an incredible writer. You really described how you felt very well and in unique way without rambling on about how hurt you were. I really enjoyed reading this and the ending was the best part. 5/5
"Please love , dry your eyes ..
There's no reason for you to cry .
You loved him lots ; I know it hurts ,
But all these tears he's just not worth ."
^^I adore this opening stanza, it showed the feeling of being strong, and was also a little inspirational which pulled me into the piece.
"He made his choice , now let him go ;
His mistake , and he'll soon know .
It won't be long , he'll be on his knees ..
But walk away , and ignore his pleas . "
^^I love the last two lines here, again it shows the feeling of being strong, and I love that, it's like you're saying, you know what? In time, you wont need him!
"The day will come ; Your heart won't ache .
No more nights will you lie awake .
The tears will stop , as the memories cease ;
His name won't hurt , and the pain will ease . "
^^Favourite stanza so far. The depth and emotion here is beautiful, although all of us always feel that we'll never get over a lover, eventually the pain does lessen, you just need to give it time, and you capture that so well within this verse.
"But until the day that all this ends ,
Remember that you've got your friends .
Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
Showing you how true love feels . "
^^The flow seemed -slightly- of to me in the last line, only slightly though.
That being said, I thought this was a beautiful way to wrap this piece up.