Comments : True Love

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Please love , dry your eyes ..
    There's no reason for you to cry .
    You loved him lots ; I know it hurts ,
    But all these tears he's just not worth ."
    `This stanza made me think of a quote that says something along the lines of, someone isnt worth your tears if you arent worth their heart. I cant think of the exact phrase but I thought this fit it well and its true, someone basically doesnt deserve you if they make you cry.. they arent worth your tears.

    "He made his choice , now let him go ;
    His mistake , and he'll soon know .
    It won't be long , he'll be on his knees ..
    But walk away , and ignore his pleas . "
    `Simple rhyme, yet great advice if you were talking to a friend.

    "The day will come ; Your heart won't ache .
    No more nights will you lie awake .
    The tears will stop , as the memories cease ;
    His name won't hurt , and the pain will ease ."
    `Youve spoken the thruth through your words.. great job.

    "But until the day that all this ends ,
    Remember that you've got your friends .
    Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
    Showing you how true love feels . "
    `This is great, and so true.. if someone leaves you, you should always remember you still have your friends to help you along, and theyll show you the true meaning of love and care.

    Well done.
    5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by lexie

    That was SOOO sweet!
    i wish i had a friend like you around when i was goin through the same thing!you're an amazing friend && write some amazing poetry.
    loveee.

  • 15 years ago

    by heartbrokengrl

    This is amazing i know exactly how his feels, such a beautiful poem! I love it
    20/5 i would put that if i could!

  • 15 years ago

    by Lethmelodis

    Please love , dry your eyes ..
    There's no reason for you to cry .
    You loved him lots ; I know it hurts ,
    But all these tears he's just not worth .

    ^^I love this stanza. Its a nice and solid introduction that pulls the reader in. You set the rhyme scheme and flow up, which you follow really well throughout the poem. Nice start.

    He made his choice , now let him go ;
    His mistake , and he'll soon know .
    It won't be long , he'll be on his knees ..
    But walk away , and ignore his pleas .

    ^^ Once again, another solid stanza. So far I really enjoy the piece. It has a sing-a-long quality to it, thanks to your use of rhyme. Still staying solid.

    The day will come ; Your heart won't ache .
    No more nights will you lie awake .
    The tears will stop , as the memories cease ;
    His name won't hurt , and the pain will ease .

    ^^This stanza remains solid as well, however I did find one tiny little problem with it. The use of 'the' twice kinda through me off a bit. It doesn't ruin the stanza by any means at all though, the rhyme scheme stays true and it still flows just as well as the first two stanzas. It just felt a bit awkward.

    But until the day that all this ends ,
    Remember that you've got your friends .
    Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
    Showing you how true love feels .

    ^^ No problems with this one at all. Great way to close the poem. Still true to the rhyme scheme and still rolling with the superb flow you set up at the beginning.

    Overall, great piece from you. I seriously found no problems except for the double 'the', and even then, it wasn't even truly a problem. Great job on writing a poem that puts a positive spin on heartbreak. Major kudos!

  • 15 years ago

    by Cierra

    Good poem very well written good job

  • 15 years ago

    by Love is a Beautiful Thing

    This poem really sends out a message it was great i love it 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Beautiful, inspiring, powerful, vivid, emotional, splendid poem. :) You did a great job with this. And I'm sure whoever you wrote it for is very pleased. :) 5/5

    Bri~

  • 15 years ago

    by ItsYou ItsAlwaysBeenYou

    Love it. so true and very encouraging. you must be an amazing friend to have and any boy that would hurt you is silly. he doesn't know what he lost. you couldn't write as well if you didn't care about people because it shows and makes this poem all the greater. 5/5 great read :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Not Enough

    "Please love , dry your eyes ..
    There's no reason for you to cry .
    You loved him lots ; I know it hurts ,
    But all these tears he's just not worth ."

    ^^ I really like the last line. I don't think the flow is all that good in the first two lines, though. I'm not sure why it just doesn't click for me.

    "He made his choice , now let him go ;
    His mistake , and he'll soon know .
    It won't be long , he'll be on his knees ..
    But walk away , and ignore his pleas ."

    ^^ Better flow in this stanza, great story here.

    "The day will come ; Your heart won't ache .
    No more nights will you lie awake .
    The tears will stop , as the memories cease ;
    His name won't hurt , and the pain will ease ."

    ^^This is def. my favorite stanza. I like the last line, I really understand it. Amazing.

    "But until the day that all this ends ,
    Remember that you've got your friends .
    Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
    Showing you how true love feels ."

    ^^ Great way to end the poem.

    All in all, I love the story behind it. I can really relate and connect to this. Awesome job!!!!!!!!!1111one

  • 14 years ago

    by Aaron Martin

    Well done. emotionally filled. good structure, and i love the rhyming scheme. great job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I think this was a perfect 'poem' to describe a 'friendship' love is genuine. I felt that you deeply care about your friend...

    Anyway

    I like the way you used 'caesura' in most lines. (I dunno if that's the correct way of calling it)
    - It gives more impact and meaning in the line.

    Please love , dry your eyes (..)
    There's no reason for you to cry (.)
    You loved him lots ; I know it hurts (,)
    But all these tears he's just not worth (.)

    - The way used a 'space' before you put a punctuation is pretty cool because it's unique. I dunno if its your own style but I like it.

    Just take our hand , and we'll help you heal ;
    Showing you how true love feels .
    - A perfect ending. This sums up the whole 'true love - friendship' bravo.

    5/5.

  • 14 years ago

    by IMMORTAL PAIN

    After reading this i now feel like shit lol. i cheated on the mother of my child. and didnt really think about how she felt. i just dont know how to live with myself. great write!!!! :( lol

  • 12 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    WOW WOW

    its one of the most true poem. every one should appliy same thing in his life.

    I simply love this poem

  • 12 years ago

    by BeMusEd

    Wow, one of the most beautiful poems I've read... Full of love..

    Keep up the good work..

  • 9 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Very nice poem to come up after breaking heart.

    Friends like u never fell their friends in aches.

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I really really like this piece. My friend showed it to me and it was actually perfect timing too. You really penned a great piece and I'm not sure what else I can say here that hasn't already been said so Thank you. For writing this. Thank you for doing such a perfect job.

  • 3 years ago

    by Jane Do-Re-Mi

    Beautiful