Comments : A World War II Story

  • 8 years ago

    by Deana

    An excellent write, I got so intrigued it was like reading a sad but good book. well done!

  • 8 years ago

    by Aveena

    Well done, nicely written.
    its sad but you tella good story.

  • 8 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, very emotional and deep story. I felt as though it was more of a story which you tried to portray via poetry. So basically what I am saying is, this feels more like prose then poetry to me.

    Overall it was kind of long, would have liked to have seen it condensed a little more, however; due to the top there is much to write about. Therefore, I think although lengthy, it doesn't lack imagery nor structure or for that matter the flow. So overall I think it is okay.

    As I stated in your other poem, I would have liked to see puncuation since it is very important in poetry. It lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as making the overall flow better.

    Great write, reminded me of a series I just recently wrote as well as the Italian movie, "Life is Beautiful" Overall excellent work, keep it up and I shall keep reading ;)

    Peace, Joe

  • 8 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Breathtaking, thats what i would call it. Very emotional indeed. Great write

    all the best and take care

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Darien
    What a sad story...keeps the reader going to the end.
    Good job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by KemistryKia

    Loved it