Wow, very emotional and deep story. I felt as though it was more of a story which you tried to portray via poetry. So basically what I am saying is, this feels more like prose then poetry to me.
Overall it was kind of long, would have liked to have seen it condensed a little more, however; due to the top there is much to write about. Therefore, I think although lengthy, it doesn't lack imagery nor structure or for that matter the flow. So overall I think it is okay.
As I stated in your other poem, I would have liked to see puncuation since it is very important in poetry. It lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well as making the overall flow better.
Great write, reminded me of a series I just recently wrote as well as the Italian movie, "Life is Beautiful" Overall excellent work, keep it up and I shall keep reading ;)