That was a unique approach to the poem. From the title i expected something slightly different with a more traditional structure, however, I prefer your version much more. I like the bit that you included about your past being your past because it gives the sense of one having learned from past mistakes. Anyway I stray from the topic, great write and I loved the effort. 5/5.

That was a unique approach to the poem. From the title i expected something slightly different with a more traditional structure, however, I prefer your version much more. I like the bit that you included about your past being your past because it gives the sense of one having learned from past mistakes. Anyway I stray from the topic, great write and I loved the effort. 5/5.

Its a good poem, but the flow wasnt quite there for me, the main part where i felt thrown off was the second verse. Nice imagery used however yet this type of poem is not one I tend to read, good job though it's a nice write

This is one of your good ones =] it's structure is presented a lot better! Again though I want to point out the flow as the person above me did, here and there it threw me off and made it difficult for me to carry on reading. I always review somebodys work everyday and I hope I havnt offended you with the crittisism. Again good write 4/5

This poem is very different from the others that I usually read. It's not, however, different in a bad way. I liked the fact that the style was new to me and it kept me reading. Keep up the good work.