A beautifull but very sad poem showing a lot of hurt and unwanted memories.
I sometimes think that our past is like a ghost that stalks our minds and slips through the cracks when we least expect or want it too.
Very well written although its not nice to see another person hurting, i hope writing this helped some

Grant

WOW cara u have outdone urself once again. This poem was beautifully crafted from the start to the finished. Well sometimes
no matter how hard we try to forget our unwanted memories, somehow it will creep out of our head. But you have portrayed and execute this poem well. Your descriptions really shows how hard that you tried.

Excellent Job
5/5

Awwww this was a reallly great poem, you can feel the pain and suffering you are going through. loved the flow and just a wonderfully written poem.

Keep it up

5/5

Cara,

The only thing that can take the sting out of bitter memories is to find it in your heart to forgive the ones who did you wrong. It does not matter if they deserve it or not. As long as you don't forgive them, you will carry the pain of what happened as a very heavy rugsack. Free yourself sweetheart. Take a good look at what happened and know that the past can nver be undone, only learned from. Take a deep breath and turn around, turn your back to the past and look the other way..the sun is rising..your future is looking bright and life is waiting for you.

The poem was beautiful btw, you are talented and what is even more important, you are such a modest and sweet young lady.

Much love,

5/5 Ingrid *hugs*

Oh my Cara this was amazing! I really enjoyed your rhyme because it didnt feel forced and just flowed flawlessly throughout the poem. Your choice of words were brillant in setting his scene for me as the reader because I felt as if I was captivated by your words and wanting more. The title was real eye catching and lured me in...I'm glad it did because this poem just blew me away. The emotion behind your words were so strong, powerful and full of meaning that I could fdeel everything you were expressing.

This has to be one of my faves by you and one of the best I have read in a while.

If I have a vote left this deserves to be nominated for the weekly contest.

Well done!
*5/5* :]

There is not much to add to all the glowing comments on this. I think we all have some memory that causes this much pain and it is hard to smile, push the pain back and smile, ready to pretend we are okay. Excellent write. 5/5

A very good write Cara..
I'm truly impressed !

"I feel my heart crying out for help, that sharp pain in my chest
The memories let themselves into my head, an uninvited guest"

I loved the broken image you portrayed here. and how you described pain as "sharp" and the uninvited guest. Very well done sweetheart.

I loved the ending stanza the most..your use of words was pretty normal at some parts..but you didn't slip with any lines.
I only have one criticism..some of the lines were too long..and I kinda lost the rhyme at some parts because of the length of the line.

Other than that..your poem was great :]
Write on !

Excellent read I love this poem, it has much emotion with great flow Very nice job Cara.

Good work

I'm speechless, 5/5. Em x