Comments : The Rhyming Coffins

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Adel
    Once again you have captivated me with your poetry.
    Excellent job!
    Take care
    Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by debbylyn

    First of all...I love the title and opening dedication...great! Many interesting phrases and verses....

    I see what you were aiming for with the repetition at the beginning of each verse, but not sure I like it...

    The rest of the verses are fantastic! I like the religious undertones and the spiritual aspects...

    Nicely done, Take care, Debbie

  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Brilliant write, incredibly powerful from the beginning to the end. I like the message of this, it's certainly memorable. You painted magnificent and truly effective pictures with your words throughout each stanza and the vividness of this poem is simply captivating. It contains mixed darkened atmosphere, fantastic choice of words and pure beauty of poetic world of its own.
    Overall, this is truly an enjoyable and original write, intricate and meaningful. I can't pick my favorite stanza because there are too many superb lines through the whole poem.

    Keep up :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    For English not to be your first language you sure do use it better than many for whom it is! There are a couple grammatical errors but aside from that boy you sure do have a way with words my friend! Beautifully penned. Such a deep and meaningful piece. Excellent job!