Comments : Lily Maid of Astelot

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Very nice Deb, I really enjoyed it, I like stories from this era. Great read.

  • 8 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Such creative write, sad, heartfelt and enchanting at the same time. You created astonishing atmosphere which perfectly matches the topic of the poem. I like your choice of words throughout the piece, so beautiful and intricate.
    The repetition added great effect to the flow and storyline within the poem. Overall, I wish it was longer, because you pulled me in deeply from the first stanza, and I could clearly imagine every line as it unfolded.

    - Come troubadours! Come balladeers!
    Entice wood thrush, robin, wren
    Play sweet notes of requiems
    As funeral dirges begin-
    ^^^
    My favorite stanza. It's truly powerful, and to me, the poem culminates here, with the most emotional and effective part of it.

    I like how the piece offered sensations for all senses- flowers in the first and the last stanza, birds in the second one, vividness of the imagery...

    Great write.

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Beautifully penned. Vivid imagery and excellent word choice that keeps in time with this part of history. Great flow and the rhythm was catchy with the repetition. Excellent job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Deana

    This is absolutely beautiful, Oh how I love romance! Thank you for including the legend.

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Such wonderfully chosen words Deb. I couldn't help but read it over and over again

    Lily Maid of Astelot,
    Silver pearls laced in her hair
    ^^^
    The imagery was amazing!

    Noble knight did not requite
    Love note, fair lady's hand
    Lovely in her slumber
    Cast on River Thames
    ^^^
    Beautiful but yet so heart touching! Makes one say "Awww"

    Thank you for the note at the bottom. I always learn something from your poems.

    Great read!

  • 8 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    I really enjoyed reading this masterpiece.