Comments : I Feel Like A Love Song

  • 8 years ago

    by Christina Gomes

    "Everything reminds me of you, jokes, words, every room"
    the first comma should be a semi-colon.

    Other than that great poem, can't think of how to improve it. I love that your first stanza and last stanza both begin with the same line. By doing this you were able to bring the whole poem together and tie it up and you brought my attention back to the beginning of the poem which made me read it for a second time. That's a wonderful thing to achieve because it gets the reader to look deeper into your writing.

    keep it up. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    "ronic isn't it? That when words fail music speaks
    Each track takes on a new meaning of being unique
    Playing those songs, hit repeat, they remind me of you
    Giving myself wholly to you, my heart you shall accrue"

    You really have a way of spreading your thoughts and emotions. They come out flawlessly. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem does not miss a beat delivering the desired passion well

  • 8 years ago

    by ilikepurple222

    I really love this one! honestly. I think it's great. People can really relate to it. Music helps me with anything. & it can instantly change my mood. keep writing because I think you're really talented. comment on any of my new ones????

  • 8 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    I found it rather enjoyable. It sets itself apart from other love poetry with the reference to music and such. The only problem is the flow is off in places. And the flow is off because of inner line rhymes in some, and not in others. Example:
    Ironic isn't it? That when words fail music speaks
    Each track takes on a new meaning of being unique
    Playing those songs, hit repeat, they remind me of you
    Giving myself wholly to you, my heart you shall accrue

    See, "repeat" rhymes with "unique" throwing off the rythme. Same thing happens in the third and fourth lines with using "you" twice. Maybe take a look at it.

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 8 years ago

    by Aish

    Naw-this is beautiful-nice repitition of "ironic isnt it?" i liked that-it worked really well.

    really nice rhythm, rhyme and flow-all consistant-5/5 from me

    aish
    xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    I really liked the way this started. My, oh my. How many of us have these thoughts and feelings about the music that ties us together? Many good thoughts in this poem, and I liked the way you strung your lines together, like the thoughts running in one's head. Very good.

  • 8 years ago

    by Stephanie Michelle

    I love it how you opened your poem with a question, that captured my attention immediately.

    Beautiful writing. Your imagery is fantastic. Though your rhythm could be touched up a little, it was by no means bad.

    (:

    Stephanie

  • 7 years ago

    by Marcus blake

    Amazing work keep it up...

  • 4 years ago

    by AJ

    First off, I love the repetition of "Ironic isn't it?"it gave the poem a full loop, providing closure and yet it leaves it open to where you could continue the poem from his eyes.

    Next, the "Two hearts melded together" threw me for a bit of a loop. I was half expecting this to be about someone who just got out of a relationship. I know I have those feelings when I hear some songs.

    Finally, "when words fail music speaks" I completely understand this. Every time I turn on the radio it is as if the music knows my emotion. I see it a lot with country music.

    I loved this overall! 5/5

    -AJ

  • 4 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    Excellent piece of poetry! I liked the flow, the emotions and the ending lines...but it doesn't mean that I didn't like the other lines...! Good job!
    5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Wow. I never thought of writing poem the way u just did. this is great. I felt the first 2 stanzas needed a little work but its great besides that. a little work as a coma in a different place or re word it a bit, but nice write..5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by RecycleBin

    I really like this piece...

  • 4 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I love it. amazing,

    "lets make our own love song"
    that is perfect.