This absolution is always incomplete, so bittersweet.

Great.. this is... i cant even describe it. it hurts. but guys just know how to play very well.. theres now way of knowing sometimes.
but somehow we have to keep our heart from breaking.
5/5
amazing
<3
Tania

Wow, that was great. The flow was good, but was a little off in a few places. Like in the first stanza, last two lines. The rhyming was okay, but again, it was a little off. The emotion was amazing. I like the questions in the third stanza, but the rhyming is a little off and the flow isn't quite there. But I really like it when poems have questions in them. It leaves the reader wondering. The last stanza has amazing emotion. But I just wish you would've made a better rhyme. good write.

Soda E>

I enjoyed the poem alot.
I almost want to rip this guys head off. I hate it when people say stupid things just to get people to fight with them, and then make you feel like complet crap afterwords. I can not only feel your anger, but its slightly empathic. very tangible emotions and utterly complexed way of looking at the situation, i know you know what is rational to do, but irrational emotions, from what i get from your poem, are telling you to stay for some strang reason

Quit looking at me with that spontaneously playful expression!
Each time you do, my mind is flooded with unanswered questions.
Why must you keep fiddling and fumbling with me till I break?
You know, when the devil tempts you, you don't always have to partake.

^I Love the first 2 stanzals here. sumtimes we say we dnt care what ppl think or what they show on their faces but times we do. n it hurts like a fudger... n i love how you opened ur poem here. nice flow indeed

Seductive promises of protection flowing from your deceiving lips.
Purely captivating lines recited from your diligently practiced scripts.
Enchanting possibilities my mind knows are inevitable to fade away.
Silly heart, why in the world would you think he would actually stay?

^Nice!!! i wouldnt change a word here. powerful message. fake promises nice. has many can relate to this part. i surly can. flow is still good

When am I going to realize it's just that the time was wrong?
When am I going to recognize all my feelings will never get along?
How can you look at me as if I'm just another entertaining project?
How can you yell at me so passionately, turn around and kiss my neck?

^amazing job here. deep and powerful indeed. words are simple but yet a great meanin in them. i lubit it. =]

You stand there tripping me only to encounter the chance to rescue me.
Leaning in ever so closely only so you can whisper what you saw on tv.
Picking a fight over something trivial so you can smile and say whatever.
Wow, after that I must admit that you are actually quite clever.

^a bit sad n a bit of wanting n needing. it reminded me of what ppl do to get to you. i actually like this part. one of my favorite so far. lubit it as well.

Attempting to manipulate my feelings or at least make them go numb.
Can someone please tell me where irrational emotions come from?
Please just stop caressing your arms around my waist like you care.
Come on, we both know you're not going to give me my fairy tale.

^awww... the emotions were right here in this piece. very imagie. i love it. love the way you ended it indeed. i wouldnt change a word here. beautiful. keep it up!!

Take CaRe,
Frenchy

That was quite powerful although it would be more powerful if you ended it like you stating of not wanting him anymore, which is just my thought nevertheless this piece already is rocking. Flows perfectly with a decent rhyming. I also liked how you managed to focus on the idea that your poem was trying to emphasize. Good job..