Lover's Mirage

by Krista   Mar 12, 2009


It felt so right,
so pure and true.
Lasting a moment,
feelings a lifetime.

Rise above love,
a simple illusion.
Hallucinations,
intoxicating lust.

Luckiness left,
leaving me alone.
Too bad I fell
into lover's mirage.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "It felt so right,
    so pure and true.
    Lasting a moment,
    feelings a lifetime."
    `I know what its like to feel love from someone and you feel like nothing is more absolute, its so prue, its so real.. nothing can be better.. it feels soo amazing and the feelings could last a lifetime with this person.

    "Rise above love,
    a simple illusion.
    Hallucinations,
    intoxicating lust."
    `I really think you should try a different style soem day soon, step out of the box and write longer lines to expands on your ideas and give us a larger sense of what you want to say. However, your word choice is good and simple and what you want to say is said well. I really liked the "intoxicating lust" that was flawlessly put.

    "Luckiness left,
    leaving me alone.
    Too bad I fell
    into lover's mirage."
    `Oh, this is too sad. Falling for someone and in the end being hurt, because you were too deep into an illusion.. but it happens a lot in life to several people. I must compliment on the great alliteration used at the beginning of the stanza, the repetitive l was quite effective.

    Good job. (:

    5/5.