Comments : Conspiracies of Time

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Excellent. Vivid images, a breeze of rememberance, memories whispering. Wondering about a first true love. Well done. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by ben thompson

    OUTSTANDING WRITE, THE WONDERING AND LONGING THIS WRITE BRINGS ABOUT ALMOST JUMP RIGHT OFF MY SCREEN AT ME. BEAUTIFUL FLOW AND RHYME VERY WELL DONE. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    The way you wrote this made the feeling of longing for this lost love almost tangible.

    You always write with as few words as possible. This adds to the power of the ones you do use.

    Beautiful.

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    What a beauitful poem.

    Beneath the silky moonlight,
    how we twirled to silver notes,
    surging in passionate tide
    waltzing in our dream-boats.

    Love's memories help us to hold on sometimes. When lonliness becomes to much to stand. We can just close our eyes and go back to a time of happiness.

    Since then, years have passed by,
    but love you, and miss you still,
    wonder, how you would look now,
    fishing near your favorite rill.

    The memory of the last time we saw the one we loved. Time stood still and then you realize how many years have passed. How would they look now....how would time have changed them.

    Daffodils- no longer flourish,
    Seasons perform discord rhyme,
    Tumbling leaves gently remind,
    Obscure conspiracies of time.

    When we don't have that love in our life....nothing seems to be the way it should.
    Excellent!
    Love Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Raj what a beautiful piece of work you have written. Absolutely touching. I enjoy your perception of things and you always use the most graceful wording to get a feeling across. Great Job.

  • 8 years ago

    by GentleButcher

    Love it , i must ov read it at least 3 times

  • Beautiful poem :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Excellent word choice, flow, imagery, rhythm and rhyme. That is why you are one of my favorites! Great job!

  • 8 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This is one of the best love poem i have come across on this site.

    all the best and take care

  • 8 years ago

    by Not Enough

    Hmm.. I don't really like this one. It's kind of not that clear. I really don't like poems like these that are trying to be 'mysterious' or wahtever. I just like it when it gets right to the point. Or at least some where say what it's supposed to mean. But I guess I'm only 14 so yeah.

    Soda E>

  • 8 years ago

    by Corinne

    This is quite beautiful. I love the lines.. waiti a minute - I love all the lines - A lovely lovely poem :-)