Excellent. Vivid images, a breeze of rememberance, memories whispering. Wondering about a first true love. Well done. 5/5

OUTSTANDING WRITE, THE WONDERING AND LONGING THIS WRITE BRINGS ABOUT ALMOST JUMP RIGHT OFF MY SCREEN AT ME. BEAUTIFUL FLOW AND RHYME VERY WELL DONE. 5/5

The way you wrote this made the feeling of longing for this lost love almost tangible.

You always write with as few words as possible. This adds to the power of the ones you do use.

Beautiful.

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

Raj
What a beauitful poem.

Beneath the silky moonlight,
how we twirled to silver notes,
surging in passionate tide
waltzing in our dream-boats.

Love's memories help us to hold on sometimes. When lonliness becomes to much to stand. We can just close our eyes and go back to a time of happiness.

Since then, years have passed by,
but love you, and miss you still,
wonder, how you would look now,
fishing near your favorite rill.

The memory of the last time we saw the one we loved. Time stood still and then you realize how many years have passed. How would they look now....how would time have changed them.

Daffodils- no longer flourish,
Seasons perform discord rhyme,
Tumbling leaves gently remind,
Obscure conspiracies of time.

When we don't have that love in our life....nothing seems to be the way it should.
Excellent!
Love Cindy

Raj what a beautiful piece of work you have written. Absolutely touching. I enjoy your perception of things and you always use the most graceful wording to get a feeling across. Great Job.

Love it , i must ov read it at least 3 times

Beautiful poem :)

Excellent word choice, flow, imagery, rhythm and rhyme. That is why you are one of my favorites! Great job!

This is one of the best love poem i have come across on this site.

all the best and take care

Hmm.. I don't really like this one. It's kind of not that clear. I really don't like poems like these that are trying to be 'mysterious' or wahtever. I just like it when it gets right to the point. Or at least some where say what it's supposed to mean. But I guess I'm only 14 so yeah.

Soda E>

This is quite beautiful. I love the lines.. waiti a minute - I love all the lines - A lovely lovely poem :-)