Comments : The True Dance Of Nature~Monchielle

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    The true dance of nature,
    Exists in each sunrise,
    And lives through crescent moons,
    When stars merrily move,
    And hover like balloons.

    ^^
    My favorite stanza:)

    You made a beautiful Monchielle, MaryAnne.
    Only a poet could write this way about nature. There is so much joy and admiration in your words:)
    Good luck on the contest!

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by mandy

    That was beautiful. It flowed so well, 5/5.

    -mandy :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "When stars merrily move,
    And hover like balloons."
    `This was quite the outstanding simile, Ive never heard something like this before so it kind of caught me by suprise, but in a really good way.. beautiful.

    This whole poem spoke true beauty.. the imagery in this piece was flawless.. "The True Dance of Nature" how beautiful that line is... and to be repeated is even more beautiful.

    A very well written Monchielle, I thought you did a great job with the form and proved that Monchielle's can be written about nature as well.

    :]

    5/5. I did enjoy this!